[纯净水1993的写作贴]4月12日一战每天12h加基本上全托请多指教

纯净水1993 · 发表于 2014-3-21 17:19:47

纯净水1993 · 发表于 2014-3-21 17:21:11

3.20日的独立写作
Perhaps no issue in this world is as significant to what people learnt as the education of families. Despite various responses people may have on the topic that school plays critical role in the development of human, I, given the chance, prefer to endorse that it is from families that we get basic idea of the world and the interest of life and how to face and thus overcome the difficulties, which are necessary to our whole life.

To begin with, mainly influenced by family members, children shape their basic idea of the world and even the interest of life. Without the knowledge about the earth, they are always curious about everyone as well as everything and in the first few years of one’s life, within the range of their parents, grandparents and other relatives are all who can meet and talk with. Thus what family member shows and tells to kids may decide the basic knowledge and contribute to the interest in specific aspects. It is well acknowledged that many children choose the same major and careers as their parents. Doctor’s children get interested in biology, author’s kids have passions in writing and engineer show better performances in the math. Therefore, what family taught us may lead to the initial interest in certain subject which accompany with us for the rest of life.

Moreover, during the second stage of child development, adolescence, family members can still be in the best position to offer advice. Adolescents are notoriously rebellious in many cultures and may automatically reject any advice from their parents. My first experience of love for instance, was solely a matter of doing the opposite when my parents tried to intrude in offering their advice but without any consideration, relationships between my parents and I went from bad to worse when I determined to pursue so-called freedom and true love. However, deeply hurt by the one who I trust more than my parents, I came bake home to heal myself and without any blame, my parents just quit all their works to accompany with me to get through it. What my parents have done me taught me that to be mature and independence, I should not judge the world in a crush but my deliberateness. And since then, I learn to look at problems dialectically reducing troubles I may be confronted with and contribute a better protection of myself.

Admittedly, other education methods like college do have certain advantages over families. Education in university is easier to lead you to consider the future life, form the structure of a discipline and apply the knowledge into practice. However, families have more valuable merits as an original, profound and constant means for people. I therefore reinforce my standpoint to suppose families as the most vital source.

qq2228757 · 发表于 2014-3-21 20:34:09

这是我帮你改的~第一次改别人的文章可能改的不是很好~如果有什么不对的地方还请你提出来

saintat · 发表于 2014-3-21 21:30:57

楼主我也是12号考一起努力！看样子你也是93年的？

纯净水1993 · 发表于 2014-3-22 11:37:19

saintat 发表于 2014-3-21 21:30
楼主我也是12号考一起努力！看样子你也是93年的？

对啊~那你今年是大三喽

纯净水1993 · 发表于 2014-3-23 17:01:03

3月22日独立补~
With regard to the debate whether people should be honest to present their ideas even if they notice others will be against to their standpoints, people tend to hold different views but usually following two: some think that people should insist what they hold regardless other’s disagreement, while others believe that it is better to hide one’s true mind to cater to other’s thought. From my prospective, I prefer to endorse that people should make their honest statements, which will improve their ability to be confronted with pressure and acquire the genuine thoughts from others.

Admittedly, there are some detriments brought by speaking out your idea with the oppositions of others. For instance, questioned by others, you are under tremendous pressure which does harm to your psychological health. Besides, in the condition that you have a wrong argument, the neglect as well as laugh will take place upon you. However, these shortcomings can be neglected when the following benefits are illustrated.

First and foremost, being faced with question from the opponents, people will gradually learn to accommodate for the stress, which plays a significant role in modern society especially in the career with competitions. My personal experience can serve as a compelling evidence to prove this point. In the discussion of almost every university courses, I expressed my ideas clearly and honestly, which contributed to the doubt of others. Facing the suspect, being nervous, hesitated and unconfident initially, I finally could treat it in calm for the adaption of the situation where the more you experience, the more unflappable you are. And as a staff after the graduation, it is easy for me to control the feeling of tension and thus handle the multi-task, which assists me to promote quickly. Hence, with the courage to express your authentic ideas, you will become mature psychologically to handle the stress.

Moreover, only claiming our personal opinions, can we gather different ideas from the others which can optimize our views. Otherwise, we cannot improve ourselves and what is more, it may bring out ridiculous fact. A good case in point is that the emperor, cheated by the tailors, wearing nothing came out to show off his new clothes and was laughed by kids. Thus the authority of the emperor was no more with the punishment for scores of ministers. However, if the emperor or the minister has been honest, it will not occur.

With all points illustrated above, it’s indubitable that people should show their honest ideas even if the disagreement occurs. The abilities of anti-pressure and collecting information from others that people gain from it will equip them with a better adaption to the competitive society as well as a stronger sense of community with their fellows in their whole lifetime.

纯净水1993 · 发表于 2014-3-23 20:21:57

求狠批~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

JanetYellen · 发表于 2014-3-23 21:19:53

纯净水1993 发表于 2014-3-23 17:01
3月22日独立补~
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