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W120 Decisions can be made quickly, or they can be made after careful thought. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The decisions that people make quickly are always wrong. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion.

In our daily life, we are confronted with lots of questions, analysis of which will definitely help us to improve the understanding the factors of our society. One of the intriguing problems is whether the decision that people make quickly are always wrong. As far as I am concerned, I would strongly support that decision made quickly are not always wrong. In the following discussion, I would like to reason and provide the evidence to support my viewpoint.

To begin with, some decisions need to be made quickly. For example, one of your families is suffering from heart disease. In such kind of situation there is no time for you to consider carefully. You have to response without delay. The best way is to call 911 immediately, and then the patient will receive the treatment right away. It is obvious that you make the right decision in the short time.

Next, some people can make the right decision quickly depending on their profuse experiences. For instance, the engineer has been working in a company for long time. He gets lot of work experiences through encountering lots of technical problems and solving them. When he faces the emergency, he can make the decision fast. Therefore it will reduce the loss of the company. At the same time, he achieves the success in his career.

In addition, same decisions don’t need you to think carefully. For instance, you are running out of food. It is distinct that you need to purchase the food in the supermarket as soon as possible. For this case, it is unnecessary for you to think cautiously, you can make a quick decision easily.

Some people may disagree with me that sometimes people will make the wrong decision without the careful thought. I have to say that, it is better for people to think carefully before they make decision. However, when some emergencies come, people need to make the decisions at once, and the decisions are not always wrong.

As discussed above, we can safely reach the conclusion that decisions which are made quickly by people are not always wrong. In some emergencies, the decision need to be made quickly, furthermore, the right decision will help to reduce the loss.

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In our daily life, we are confronted with lots of questions, analysis of which will definitely help us to improve the understanding the factors of our society. One of the intriguing problems is whether the decision that people make quickly are always wrong. As far as I am concerned, I would strongly support that decision(s) made quickly are not always wrong. In the following discussion(s), I would like to reason(感觉这里REASON和后面的EVIDENCE搭不上) and provide the evidence to support my viewpoint.

To begin with, some decisions need to be made quickly. For example, one of your families is suffering from heart disease. In such kind of situation（S） there is no time for you to consider carefully. 我觉得这里加个AND比较合适，因为后者表达的是并列关系。 You have to response without delay. Definitely, the best way is to call 911 immediately, and then the patient will receive the treatment right away. It is obvious that you make the right decision in the short time.

Next, some people can make the right decision quickly depending on their profuse experiences. For instance, the engineer has been working in a company for long time. For instance 与下面重复的表达，如下做了些修改： In this case, let us suppose that there is an engineer who has been working in a company for a long time. He gets lot of work experiences through encountering lots of technical problems and solving them. With no doubt, he has got lots of work experiences through encountering many technical problems and solving them. So when he faces the emergency, he can make the right decision as soon as he could, therefore moreover, it will reduce the loss of the company and gain the succession in his career .  At the same time, he achieves the success in his career.

In addition, same decisions don’t do not need you to think carefully. For instance, you are running out of food. It is distinct that you need to purchase the food in the supermarket as soon as possible. For this case, it is unnecessary for you to think cautiously, as you can make a quick decision easily.

Some people may disagree with me that sometimes people will make the wrong decision without the careful thought. I have to say that, it is better for people to think carefully before they make making decisions. However, when some emergencies come, people need to make the decisions at once and those are not always wrong.

As discussed above, we can safely reach the conclusion that decisions which are made quickly by people are not always wrong. In some emergencies, the decisions need to be made quickly, furthermore, the right decisions will help to reduce the loss

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注意单复数的使用，还有一些的重复表达，建议多看些范文，收集同一意思不同的表达法。觉得理由段写得有点少，我现在也面临这个问题，觉得写不出东西来，对这个题目；还可以举例打战的时候，司令做出的一些快速决定对整个战局都有很大的影响

以上是我个人的一些见解，希望对你有帮助。

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