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她本科是哥伦比亚大学本科毕业。前一段时间帮助不少同学练习托福口语，发现大家用的模版都差不多，说起“喜欢的书”都是“哈利波特” （内容也惊人地相似呵呵）。 很多用词也很chinglish （哪怕是模版）。比方说最近看到的一个模版是这样的：
问题： 你是愿意当leader还是当follower
Of course, I would like to be the leader for the following reasons. Firstly, to be a leader definitely improves my various abilities, such as communication, organization, leadership and handling ability. These are essential to lead a team with many complex troubles. And second, in college, I always as a leader of various student unions and student associations. So I do not like to be regulated by others, the only way to get rid of this status is to be the leader and regulate others myself.
Frankly speaking, although to be a leader is a hard work, it will has a great influence on the future career.
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Of course (这个听起来很obnoxious，自以为是）, I would like to be the leader （“a leader”, 不是 “the leader”）for the following reasons. Firstly （"first", 不是“firstly"), to be a leader definitely （不要总用definitely，比较自以为是） improves my various abilities （这个语句不通）, such as communication, organization, leadership and handling ability （“handling ability" 完全不通）. These are essential to lead a team with many complex troubles （"complex troubles" 完全不通). And second, in college, I always as a leader of various student unions and student associations. So I do not like to be regulated by others （没有“be regulated by others”的说法，一般都是一个事情或事务可以被”regulated“，人职能被”controlled”）, the only way to get rid of this status （“get rid of this status"不通，而且get rid of 是个很重的词。感觉作者非常非常鄙视劳动人民，这一点在美国是很不好的大家要记住了，其实美国人说话比较喜欢保持对各个阶层人的尊重，哪怕是在表面上的，表露出鄙夷也是很不好的）is to be the leader and regulate others myself.
Frankly speaking （“frankly speaking” 的比较正确的中文翻译是“我就老实跟你说吧”，在这片段落里接得比较顺得是：“谁想当个蚂蚁给人捏啊”, 语气不是很和谐） although to be a leader is a hard work, it will has a great influence on the （"my"，不是“the” ）future career.
我觉得比较顺的说法（按照本模版原意，但是语气更尊重人一些，没有那么匪气）：
I would like to be a leader more than a follower. Mainly there are two reasons for that:
First, being a leader gives me abundant opportunities for personal growth in different areas, such as communication skills, organizational skills, and problem solving skills. These skills are essential to whatever goals I pursue in the future. Second, I have always been active in taking leadership roles in my school. I was an active member in student council, and various student clubs. I guess naturally I like to speak up in a group, and guide team members to make collaborative decisions, so naturally I always emerge as a leader amongst my peers. Although being a leader requires a lot of hard work, I think it's totally worth it because I can make positive impact on other people.
总结：
大家讲中文的时候也有这种感觉吧，同样的意思，不同的说法，会很不一样。来到美国的同学可能都知道，经常说一些什么话，意思是好的，但是说出来了觉得完全不代表自己的本意。比方说，在刚才的模版上，作者说的第二点和总结，让人觉得他是个狂妄的暴君，自我感觉及其良好，而且还很没有修养地鄙视其他的人。最重要的是，美国人心中的“leadership”和中国不一样，不是高高在上地发话然后管别人，而是怎样带领团队，解决问题。所以说到leader，其实不一定是坐在一个位子上，很可能是生活中的“领导”，做一些小事，做一些好的决定。
写这个文章的朋友说原意免费帮助还在准备托福的朋友。所以可以留下微信号什么的。帮助大家改个2、3个托福口语问题应该是没有问题的，先来的有优势，因为她时间有限。
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