Argument 125，第一次写作，求帮忙修改！

Q.

The following appeared in ahealth newsletter.

"A ten-year nationwidestudy of the effectiveness of wearing a helmet while bicycling indicates thatten years ago, approximately 35 percent of all bicyclists reported wearinghelmets, whereas today that number is nearly 80 percent.

Another study, however,suggests that during the same ten-year period, the number of bicycle-relatedaccidents has increased 200 percent.

These results demonstrate thatbicyclists feel safer because they are wearing helmets, and they take morerisks as a result.

Thus, to reduce the number ofserious injuries from bicycle accidents, the government should concentrate moreon educating people about bicycle safety and less on encouraging or requiringbicyclists to wear helmets."

Write a response in which youexamine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure toexplain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implicationsare for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The conclusion of this argument is that the government should concentratemore on educating people about bicycle safety and less on encouraging orrequiring bicyclists to wear helmets in order to reduce the number of seriousinjuries from bicycle accidents. To justify this conclusion,first of all, the author pointed out that bicyclists feel safer because theyare wearing helmets, and they take more risks as a result, moreover, the author supported his argument by attributing the increase in accidents caused by bicyclingto wearing helmets. However, the author’s recommendation suffers from severalflaws, which makes it unconvincing.

Secondly, theauthor cited that bicyclists feelsafer because they are wearing helmets, and they take more risks as a result. However, there is no direct evidence to provethat bicyclists who wear helmet feelsafer and they are too careless to cause accidents. For example, it is possible that most accidents For example, it is possible that a great numbers of accidentswhich were caused by careless car drivers, not bicyclists who wear helmet . Moreover, it is also possible that it may impute careless pedestrians to accidents. Thus, it is groundless to attributes accidents to bicyclists who wear helmets.

Finally, the author unfairly presumes that educating people aboutbicycle safety is more effective than wearing helmets in reducing the number ofserious injuries from bicycle accidents. The author does not provide the data that how many serious accidents are caused by those bicyclists who wears helmets and by those bicyclists who are not educated about bicycle safety.  For instance, it is possible that the reason that many serious accidents happen because bicyclists do not wear helmets. It is also possible that serious that many serious accidents happen because car divers do not abide by traffic rules.