argument 61. 求版主拍！

yufei1990 · 发表于 2013-3-10 21:42:58

61.The following appeared in an article in the Grandview Beacon.
"For many years the city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony. Last year, however, private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent and attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series doubled. The symphony has also announced an increase in ticket prices for next year. Given such developments, some city commissioners argue that the symphony can now be fully self-supporting, and they recommend that funding for the symphony be eliminated from next year's budget."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

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In this argument, the author concludes that the city commissioners recommend eliminate the symphony funding from Grandview budget due to the symphony can be fully self-supporting now based on following evidences. Private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent and attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series doubled. In addition, the symphony has also announced an increase in ticket prices for next year. The author conclusion is convincing at the fist glance, in fact, those evidences the author indicate still have several questions.
First of all, It is true that private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent, while we do not know the the how the original private contributions is? It is possible that the original private contributions very low, even if the private contributions increased 500 percent, the Grandview Symphony still need to the funding from the budget to maintain the daily pay of performance. Do not mention the 200 percent. To make the author more logical, the author should give the information of the original number of private contributions.
Secondly, the question is how much is original attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series. Perhaps, the original number of attendance is one hundred. Even though the attendance of symphony increased by 200 percent, the attendance of symphony still very low. In this way, a number of ticket still low, and they do not earn the money even to pay the fee of area and advertisement. Even if the original number of attendance of symphony is so many so that every concert does not leaves any empty seat. Increasing this number of attendance by decrease ticket prices, like this, they fundamentally cannot earn money. To strengthen the author conclusion, the arguer should provide more information about the original number of attendance and the ticket price.
last but not least, the fact that the symphony has also announced an increase in ticket prices for next year the author indicate. It's evidence is still vague. The symphony just announce that they will increase in ticket prices, but they do no take this action now. The next year the symphony indicate, but we do not know whether they will increase or maintain or even decrease. This evidence also lack of logical deduction, to strengthen this evidence, the author should ensure the ticket will increase, no matter what happened in pride of this year, even if the financial crisis.
To sum up, the author's conclusion lack of strong reason, so that hasty conclusion will break the prospect of the Grandview symphony. Therefor, in order to make a politic decision the author should provide more information to keep the society stationary.

yufei1990 · 发表于 2013-3-10 21:49:11

第三篇用了50分钟！！！粘贴到WORD中去，红红红红红红红红红红红红红红红红红红！ word 不能修改语法错误，所以根本看不出来，我哪些句子有问题。已经检查了2遍。

我把单词都改过来了，避免版主浪费时间在单词上。非常感谢！！

竹林中人 · 发表于 2013-3-11 21:27:32

In this argument, the author concludes thatthe city commissioners recommend eliminate the symphony funding from Grandview
budget due tothe symphony can be fully self-supporting now based on following evidences.Private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent and attendanceat the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series doubled. In addition, thesymphony has also announced an increase in ticket prices for next year. The author’s conclusion seemsconvincing at the fist glance, but in fact those evidences it figures out still have several questions which weakens the conclusion Firstof all, It is true that private contributions to the symphony increased by 200percent, while we do not know how the original privatecontributions is?(how much the …….不要问号) It ispossible that the original private contributions is very low and even if the private contributions increased 200percent, the percentile it takes in the whole investmentwill possibly be so small that the Grandview Symphony still need to thefunding from the budget to maintain the daily pay of performance. To make the argument more logical, the author should give theinformation of the original quantity and percentile in wholeinvestment of private contributions.
Secondly, the question is how much the original attendance is at thesymphony's concerts-in-the-park series. Perhaps, the original number ofattendance is one hundred. Even though the attendance of symphony increases by200 percent, the attendance of symphony is still very low. In this way, anumber of ticket still low, and they do not earn the money even to pay the feeof area and advertisement. Even if the original number of attendance ofsymphony is so many so that every concert does not leaves any empty seat.Increasing this number of attendance by decrease ticket prices, like this, theyfundamentally cannot earn money. To strengthen the author conclusion, thearguer should provide more information about the original number of attendanceand the ticket price.
last but not least, the fact that the symphony has also announced anincrease in ticket prices for next year the author indicate. Its evidence isstill vague. The symphony just announces that they will increase in ticketprices, but they do no take this action now. The next year the symphonyindicates, but we do not know whether they will increase or maintain or evendecrease. This evidence also lack of logical deduction, to strengthen thisevidence, the author should ensure the ticket will increase, no matter whathappened in pride of this year, even if the financial crisis.
To sum up, theauthor's conclusion lack of strong reason, so that hasty conclusion will breakthe prospect of the Grandview
symphony. Therefore, in order to make a politic decision the author shouldprovide more information to keep the society stationary.对数据的质疑，不是很充分，虽然你知道怎么回事儿，但没说好。第二段红色部分是我改的部分，仅供参考

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