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In the profile of the Mozart school of music, the author procalims that parents should give priority to the school when planning music education for their children. As evidence the author points out the school is easily accessible and owning adequate instuments, some wonderful teachers and wide-ranged music types. Furthermore, the author take some successful graduates as examples to promise a possibly bright furture. Close scrutiny of each piece of evidence, however, reveals that none of this evidence can lead to the assumption that the school should be the first choice.
First, no access limitation can not guarantee the quality of school education. Could you just imagine a 3-year-old music amateur and a 22-year-old adept join in the same school to learn the piano? Perhaps students from differernt ability and age levels may share commom basic capacity of learing and they might help each other to make progress. Nonetheless, to teach all these students may need lessons at different ability and age levels for only one course. Thus, a prodigious number of faculty would overwhelm the school's finace. In order to lower the cost, incompetent teachers would be hired. Fianlly, the school would be notorious for its poor quality education.
Also, the well-equipemented school very likely demand high tuitions. For some poor families, how could this expensive school be their first choice?
In addition to the previous analysis, the supplied vague data is the most questionable part. No accurate percentage of "the most diatinguished musicicians" in whole faculty cannot convince me that the average level of teachers is high. Similarly, without specific information about those celebrated and wealthy musicians graduated form Mozart, the promise of a brilliant furture can't hold water.Even though these graduates, just like the arthor said, are living blessed lives, the single sample is insufficient to draw any general conclusion about new students attending in the school.
In sum,the conclusion relises on certain doubtful asssumptions that render it unconvincing as it stands. To bolster the conclusion the author must provide clear evidence --- perhaps by way of a school internal survey or study--- that the whole number of teachers and those famous musicians and the specific information of those accomplished graduates. The school also must change the relaxed standard to recruit new students. |
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