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发表于 2012-8-18 14:37:49 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
From the auther's opinions we can get a knowledge of that techonlogy make little contribution to the progress of war .violence. poverty and so forth .
Is that thrue ?I can't agree with it absolately In my opinion this statement is too extreme
 It is known to us all the end to promote the techonlogy is to benefit  our humanbeings,so there is no doubt techonlogy has its influention on our living
improvement.
 when comes to the case of medical techonlogy which has closely relation with us has made a breakthrough .Now one can use new biotechnology and
medical facilities predict and prevent disearse.Besides prothese and organ transplanted to vaccines and lasers all about these depend on the development
of technology
 The computer technology 's contribution is easy to see,which can surely help to relay one's burden .The reason why is that computer can remarkbale help
to perform number-crunching and other rote cerebral tasks with a flawless accuracy and at  increadibly speed it also can store plenty of datas and sources
whithout solicitous of lossing them . What's more  the technology can surely help to save time and make things more convenient so that we would have much
more time to do other things whith must be done by humen's cerebral.
 Attention also should be paid to the contribution of techonlogy to economic growth.The advent of steel production and assembly-line manufacturning  created countless jobs. The significent positive impact that the modern-industrial and so forth have had largely advandanced our life prre ogress.
 Yet,as for war it is a unavoid phenonment in the world due to different opinions and cultuare background of humanbeings who come from different areas.It is obverious that benefit is a primary reason that would pround to
generate a war,techonlogy can improve the stagement of people's living but can hardly change people's opinions and nature ,agreesivess is a instrinsinte nature of humen.I fundamental agree that techonlogy surely can do little about poverty maybe because of its unperfect.To some extend techonlogy can make source used much reasonate but it still can meet everyone's requirement because of the shortage of source .Violence is also a unavoid factor in the society of humanbeings since it is a way to befeat others and accquir much benefit while that can not depute that techonlogy can't promote our life
 On balance, the enmourous developement surely plays a essential role in promoting the development of our progress through it doesn't make a big difference in some aspects such as war poverty and violence which manily depends on improving the moral of quality and knowledge level so that can deal with these problems on earth. For my opinion one is supposed to have a appreciate attitude at techonlogy so that can benefit for us more.
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沙发
发表于 2012-8-19 10:51:38 | 只看该作者
第一段:From the auther's opinions we can get a knowledge of that techonlogy make little contribution to the progress of war .violence. poverty and so forth .
Is that thrue ?I can't agree with it absolately In my opinion this statement is too extreme
It is known to us all the end to promote the techonlogy is to benefit  our humanbeings,so there is no doubt techonlogy has its influention on our living
improvement.

author 写成auther, true 写成thrue.

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I can't agree with it absolately In my opinion this statement is too extreme  之间缺标点符号

It is known to us all the end to promote the techonlogy is to benefit  our human beings,  这句话我没有理解得了。


建议背几篇范文。
板凳
发表于 2012-8-19 19:58:07 | 只看该作者
这个题目理解上我觉得你有很大的问题,从你的第一句话看。PS:你把你的文章先放到word里改一下基本的单词拼写和语法错误。
地板
 楼主| 发表于 2012-8-31 05:57:08 | 只看该作者
嗯嗯 谢谢
怎么考虑背那些题目呢??我10.20考试  希望您给指点一下吧
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-8-31 06:01:31 | 只看该作者
It is known to us all the end to promote the techonlogy is to benefit  our human beings,
我本来的意思是在我们所知提高技术的目的是有利于人类。。。。
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-8-31 06:02:04 | 只看该作者
嗯嗯 谢谢  明白了
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