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Question: What knowledge is important? The knowledge from the book or the knowledge gained from the experience?

The question of which kind of knowledge is important, the knowledge gained from experience or the knowledge from the book has been a controversial topic for many years. Of courses, it is very difficult to make a judgment, because different kind of people had their own reason to support their opinions. In my point of view, I support the point that the knowledge gained from the experience is the most important. I have the following reasons that make me have this propensity.

Generally speaking, the knowledge gained from the experiences is unique, which means different kind of people has different kind of working experience, family background, education level. These diverse elements make people have diverse knowledge. For instants, in a some group of students, some of them join the global company and develop themselves into a manager or businessman after they graduated, some of them become writers, teachers, or literature people, the rest of them maybe spend their life in a farm or village. These various experience sculpt them into different personalities and each of them gains different kind of knowledge from this changing process.

On the other hand, the knowledge gained from the experience can be accumulated according to the time you have spent, the elder ago you are, the more experience you earned, this precious knowledge make you become wiser. There is an old saying in China, if you do not listen to what the elders said, you must feel regret what you have done one of the day. This old saying can prove that the knowledge from the elder must richer than the young people. It is very possible that the elders accumulated their experience which gained from their old experience, and remind the young people to pay attention to problem that it is possible to happen in the future, and avoid some mistakes. Therefore, the experience accumulated from the experience is the elder, the more precious.

Finally, the experience gained from the experience brings creativity. Most of the creativities are made by the people who has the same previously experiences. They make the creation not until they recognized some defects from the old experience, then make improvement and change the defects. That is why we have monochrome TV first, colored TV secondly, home telephone first, and mobile phone secondly. The previous knowledge gained from experience tells us what need to be improve, then brings us new innovations.

The knowledge from the book brings us the base of the science which can be defined as the derivation of our knowledge. The most important and valuable knowledge should come from the experience you have gained from everyday life. It is a knowledge that can not be replaced, taken away from you and makes you rich.  

感谢楼上的修改，呵呵，真是要再努力啊！！