谢了篇作文，不求高，大家帮忙看看能不能得4分以上！！！

deityc · 发表于 2011-5-29 09:51:35

4、There are many sources to get news today, such as newspaper, internet, radio. The newspaper is the most important one.

Whether the newspaper is still the most important way as it was during last one hundred years to distribute news among the variety of information sources is a hot issue. In today’s society, some people keep the habit to review newspaper every day, but the others especially young people may think that the newspaper is outmoded, as compared to internet ,radio and TV. Even though it is too absolute to claim that the newspaper will disappear in the near future and will be replaced by other information provider. I totally agree that the newspaper has not been the most important one when people want to acquire news at present.
In the first place, the overwhelming reason that I hold such a position is that after recent twenty years developing, Internet is available to everyone no matter where the person is. And more and more electronic device could connect to the internet by a simple and effective way. The above truths suggest that person could acquire news in a free style through internet, if they have a cell-phone or laptop. But the attractive scene can not be realized by newspaper, because it is impossible to get newspaper anywhere and anytime when you want to know what is happening in the world.
In the second place, there is another reason for me to choose this statement. The reader of the newspaper only can obtain information in a passive mode, and they can not expect that the newspaper provide the interested information which they want to know just in time. What is worse is that the reader has to buy more than one piece of newspaper to dig sufficient messages, because most of newspaper only dedicate to one scope, such as sport or finance. All above inconvenient and drawback of newspaper all could be overcome by internet. The powerful search-engine, such as Google and Yahoo, give the user privilege to acquire any information they want. The user also can get diversity news just though clicking the button of mouse.
In the third place, as everyone know, the newspaper is made from wood which is from forest and forest is the most efficient “instrument” to absorb the greenhouse that led to the temperature enhancement in the previous one hundred years on earth.All people and government have realized the importance of reducing the greenhouse gas now and make rule to protect forest. Hence reading newspaper is not a correct way to protect the environment, as compared to reading virtual news on internet.
To sum up, due to the above mentioned reasons, and more and more people turning to new Internet media, I have confident to reach a conclusion that newspaper is not the most important source of news anymore and it will be replaced by other infromation provider gradually.

deityc · 发表于 2011-5-29 10:13:53

哈哈大家给点意见作文是最没底的

xiaoqiaoli · 发表于 2011-5-29 16:33:26

Whether the newspaper is still the most important way as it was during last one hundred years to distribute news among the variety of information sources is a hot issue. In today’s society, some people keep the habit to review newspaper every day, but the others especially young people may think that the newspaper is outmoded, as compared to internet ,radio and TV. Even though it is too absolute to claim that the newspaper will disappear in the near future and will be replaced by other information provider. I totally agree that the newspaper has not been the most important one when people want to acquire news at present.
In the first place, the overwhelming reason that I hold such a position is that after recent twenty years developing, Internet is available to everyone no matter where the person is. And more and more electronic device could connect to the internet by a simple and effective way( 用in a simple and effective way 可能会更好). The above truths suggest that person(a person) could acquire news in a free style through internet, if they have(he has) a cell-phone or laptop. But the attractive scene can not be realized by newspaper, because it is impossible to get newspaper anywhere and anytime when(是不是用whenever 会更好些呢？) you want to know what is happening in the world.
In the second place, there is another reason for me to choose this statement. The reader(s) of the newspaper only can (can only) obtain information in a passive mode, and they can not expect that the newspaper (will) provide the interested(interesting) information which they want to know just in time(感觉到有点奇怪). What is worse is that the reader has to buy more than one piece of newspaper to dig sufficient messages, because most of newspaper(most newspapers 会不会更好些呢？) only dedicate to one scope, such as sport or finance. All above inconvenient(inconvenience) and drawback of newspaper all(感觉应该删除，和前面的all 有点重复) could be overcome by internet.（这句话，个人觉得改成这样会更好些吧：all inconvenience and drawbacks of newspapers mentioned above can be overcome by Internet.） The powerful search-engine, such as Google and Yahoo, give(s) the user privilege to acquire any information they want. The user (of Internet) also can get diversity(diverse) news just though(改成only by会不会更好些？) clicking the button of mouse.
In the third place, as everyone know(s), the newspaper is made from wood which is from forest and forest is the most efficient “instrument” to absorb the greenhouse(吸引温室？感觉好奇怪。。应该是greenhouse gases吧) that led to the temperature enhancement in the previous one hundred years on earth.（这句有点看不懂。。。）All people and government have realized the importance of reducing the greenhouse gas now and make rule to protect forest. Hence reading newspaper is not a correct way to protect the environment, as compared to reading virtual news on internet.
To sum up, due to the above mentioned reasons, and more and more people turning to new Internet media, I have confident(confidence) to reach a conclusion that newspaper is not the most important source of news anymore and it will be replaced by other information provider gradually.

总的来说文章思路各个方面应该是没有多大的问题，主要是词句要好好斟酌一下在用，还有一些语法错误最好不要出现哦~感觉LZ犯得语法错误大多是比较低级的，所以LZ在平时练习时多注意可定没问题的！

我相信只要LZ能够克服这些语法错误，四分肯定没问题的！！

LZ加油~~~

deityc · 发表于 2011-5-29 16:58:03

哈哈 xiaoqiaoli 一直是比较粗心感觉应该错误蛮多的谢了我得好好注意一下了

谢了篇作文，不求高，大家帮忙看看能不能得4分以上！！！

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