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发表于 2011-2-28 21:12:45 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
87. What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.





With the increasingly rapid development of high-tech society and era, we can feel more and more new things have been brough in our lives. Whether you thought this question like me--what invention in the last 100 years has been most necessary for us to change our everyday life? Different individuals must hold different opinions. However, as I concern it, computer must be this necessity.

When I was  ten-year old, a student in hometown's elementary school, one day, and my father invested a new friend to our home. It was the oldest computer in my house now. In that time, I could not believe my eyes. Since that, my interest have translated to a new sphere, chatting with my classmates, teachers, writing friends becoming the best things I want to do. What's more, my mother bought some learning software for my study. I admitted this was a new way for studying.

With the computer being a member of many families, it also brings some convenience to people. I deem it is a big event that someday computer gets together with Internet. It is Internet that makes computer be a important component of humanity. We cannot deny that computer to is like water to fish, especially to the young. Every day, I cannot wait to surf internet, this big information net, to learn about what happen this whole day. Because this is the fastest way I can take action. At the same time, I will click the websites of many shopping store to look for good things.





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想请教一下,是不是考前都得准备好模板?这样才能打得快,达到一定的字数。
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发表于 2011-3-4 16:38:15 | 只看该作者
我觉得不是,主要是靠反应速度。独立写作不建议用模板的,会限制自己的发挥。lz的作文我看了一下,我不敢说我神马都懂,只是有些表达是不是有点中国化了?brough是什么意思呢?还有like me就是完全不必要的(即使在中文里面也是不必要的吧)。后面的那个question也是完全占字数,没有重述的必要。 Different individuals must hold different opinions. 这种一般会表达成it varies from person to person。be necessary会比较简洁。貌似文章没有结构也没有清晰的层次结构,也米有鲜明的观点。建议您多去看点范文就会写了。

我只是刚刚无聊闲逛了一下。帮你顶一下。不一定对。参考罢了。
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