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寿命延长(自己写的,菜鸟一个,大家尽情拍吧)

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发表于 2010-8-12 23:27:38 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
Although most people wish to live long lives, attempting to significantly extend the average human life span would be a mistake. If achieved, this would place an enormous burden on resources, lowering the quality of life for everyone.



The speaker claims that if people live long lives, society would suffer from a huge burden on resources, lowering the quality of life for everyone. To some extend, the assertion seems reasonable since the more people share sources, the fewer sources everyone would gain. However, the speaker fails to consider that people living long lives could create not only more substantial materials but also valuable spirit materials, which will promote society progress.



People who live long lives could extend their working span and then create substantial material and spirit material for the whole society. Nowadays, many people, more than sixty, still work for industries, universities and organization. And some of them occupy the essential positions because of their valuable experience, profound knowledge and dept skills. For example, older leaders could help industries get out of financial trouble because of their valuable experience; older professors could explain difficulties clearly and vividly because of their profound knowledge; older car repairers could figure out car problems at first glance and fix it up quickly because of their dept skills. And people usually gain experience, knowledge and skills by long time practice. Thus, the longer people live, the more resources people could create.



Especially famous people, such as Adison and Linkon, if they could extend their live span, they will make uncountable contribution for the society. If they were live long lives, they would have more time to fulfill their ideal and promote the progress of the society. Adison may invent more electronic machine which will help people get out of the burdens of heavy jobs and Linkon may promote the civil activity and diminish the discriminate of racial. In this sense, attempting to significantly extend the average human life span is meaningful for the society.



Admittedly, society needs to provide more resources for people if they live longer lives. It is common sense that people need to consume food, water and etc to survive and someone may argue that these people occupy sources for younger people. However, resources which older people create always exceed the recourses they consume, since older people usually consume less but create more valuable substantial and spirit materials.



In conclusion, attempting to significantly extend the human life is not definitely a mistake. It would bring out more precious substantial and spirit materials though more people will occupy more sources. And especially for the famous people, their impact and contribution would grow with time.
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沙发
发表于 2010-8-13 17:52:19 | 只看该作者
我也去写个。。
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2010-8-14 05:55:33 | 只看该作者
木有人给意见么
地板
发表于 2010-8-15 23:59:26 | 只看该作者
不错不错了呀~我都想不到呢~感谢你的文章,提供了思路~嘿嘿
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发表于 2010-8-16 10:40:13 | 只看该作者
我之前也写了个,但是保准是3分的作文。。就不发给你们看了。但是我觉得我的论点还是很好的。和你们说下。
1。日本老龄化问题严重,其中百岁老人人数的增加,为社会造成了极大负担。而现在,许多百岁老人被查出来早已失踪,日本社会似乎松了一口气。
2。一个量化分析:用一个人有限的工作创造的来支付他工作前,工作中,和退休后的生活。能够自行担负的退休后生活有限度。
3。让步,如果科技进步和工作效率提高,下一代人能够在工作中创造更多,似乎可以支持年轻一代和老一代一个更长的生命。

当然,我的论点主要是着眼于社会资源,而不是自然资源。其实感觉自然资源更容易说,单是却想不到更多。自然资源有限,活得越久用得越多,资源越少,压力越大。。
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发表于 2010-12-12 19:23:25 | 只看该作者
我也试着写了,但我的想法是 寿命延长确实如 speaker的观点一样。
burden on resources
lowering quality of life.

我就按这两点展开了。

之后还说了下 admittedly    extending life span is good in some conditions...

这样行吗?
7#
发表于 2010-12-14 15:37:50 | 只看该作者
我也写了...哈哈

态度就是觉得同意题目的说法
具体理由就是:1. 自然资源不够用
             2. 社会老龄化 用了东欧的一个例子说养老问题 最后导致和年轻人抢饭碗
             3. 区分长寿和健康 老年人的生活质量不一定不高
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发表于 2011-1-24 22:32:26 | 只看该作者
楼主在分析时候要虚实结合 detail用得没问题,但论述应该用更加专业点的举行和词汇 建议多看范围,总结下论述的常见套句和词汇。语言不要太死板
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