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锁骨evelyn · 发表于 2010-9-2 11:39:18

题目：there will be fewer cars in use after 20 years than there are today.

回答：
It is a fact that people are getting more and more concious on enviroment preservation today,we see notions about this issue everywhere,no matter on buses,televisons or newspapers.and a stronger and stonger voice of claim to less cars in use has been brongt into focus which lead to some innocent people are prone to believe there will be fewer cars running in 20 years than there are today.however, this is not the case from my perspective.

though some concrete actions has been done to aviod pollution,the desperate plight of enviroment condition can't eclipse the fact that the overheated desiration of potential car use derived from the need of all kinds also had to be be taken into consideration without decay.

accompanied with the prompt urge from enviromentalist is the daily increasingly neccessary demand for dramatically more cars,especially in those developing country where their starting of economical prosper produced numourouse amount of newly-wealth and middleclasses who want to enjor luxieries as did in western countries.among them,cars is their first chioce to display the wealth.one of my friends's family is right the example.can you imagine a 3-people family possess 5 cars?it is what really happend in real life.

after all,not all people are heartfelt proponent to enviroment protection.except those with huge properties,most general public owns a simple will to get a car just for convenience.life in today have married to cars since the restrictions people reside usually extend across a dramatical areasour society is filled with such instances.it is up to 2 hours for my parent spending on cars to go to work.how it will be without a car?5hours'walking to work?

undoubtfully,combat to destruction of enviroment is progress continually,whereas,the expanding necessarity for cars is the trend is indeed the truth instead of the nonbers of cars will cut down in 20 years.

swp85008 · 发表于 2010-9-2 16:36:51

no thesis sententce .
without corhesive organize less clearly points in this essay

锁骨evelyn · 发表于 2010-9-3 11:53:15

太感谢了我前几天发上来都没人理。。。

锁骨evelyn · 发表于 2010-9-3 13:24:45

麻烦你再帮我看一篇太感激了
题目：people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do
We college students are always be questioned in a critically accent :haven't you identified in yourself wasting too much time on personal enjoyment rather than those should be done?It is not only us but also the whole population that appears to have been assumed in a deficiency of sense of responsibility.The reason quoted by critics derives from the claimthat overmuch time that should have been spent of greater significance has been threw on recreations.is that really the case? I won't stay consistent with this idea.

There isno way around the fact that a tiny fraction ofof our generation go beyond the normal restrict to even crazy about self-enjoyment killing time in nonsense,among them, like drug abuses arising social criminals,addiction to alcohol to escape who we are,or indulged in fictional imaginary filled with dark thoughts are some sort of outstanding.These phenomenon,however, definitely are not the predominant current.Fom my viewpoint,the absolute majority humans today indeed bare the awareness of what we are supposed to do and,actually,we are appling this awareness into practise.

From the macro view,hardly can the truth be denied that this society is on its path to continually progress,which provides the most convincing evidence against the notion made by critics.How can a society system develop at such amazingly great pace if excessive time were not appropriately used ?Have we generation fallen into so obsessed with watching TV and playing games that putting the Africa hungar issue aside ?or letting alone this acute plight of economics or eclipsing that reconstruction and preservation of ecosystem had to be undertaken withoutdelay?

While from the microscope point,for us of all, motivated by the the pressure to make a living for substance then based on which moving on to pursue a better life ,we set the destinationand push us move forward untill graduate to complete the compulsory task.Though during this we may spare some tiny time to make pleasure, the essential aim lies in preparing us into a better condition. Our surrounding is filled with such cases.For example, there are 45 students in my class,i can see around 40 of them plunge into library or classrooms almost everyday,even weekends and holidays is no exception!We may squeeze a night to have a big supper or doing some sports once a week,do these count as overmuch?Others like one of my aunt is typical ,she is now 33.She could have chosen to abandon working after having a baby to enjoy a long vacation whereas she chose the opposite cause a few works are waiting to be done.

Based on all the observation I made,Iwill stand firmly the contrast side to the notion that we excessively enjoyed ourselves.
能不能具体的帮我该一下实在感激不尽

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