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发表于 2008-8-13 14:56:00 | 只看该作者

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题目:One should never judge a person by external appearance?

External appearance is very important. But judging a person by external appearance, as no doubt, is wrong.

 

Handsome or beautiful faces and tidy clothes invariably can please others. Seldom people like to work or make friends with a dingy person. What is more, sometimes a splendid appearance is necessary. For instance, when we attend a formal celebration, it is correct to wear formal suit to indicate our respect to the host.

 

However, it does not mean that we can judge a person by external appearance. As follows, I will analyze my standpoint from two aspects.

 

From working perspective, when we employ someone, we hope that he/she has the abilities we need. We have no obligation and also will not maintain one's living just because he/she is good-looking. What is more, a good-looking person, especially a beautiful girl, sometimes might provoke some troubles in a team. Take my team for example, I ever employed a pretty girl, and several young men want to woo her. As the result, those boys could not cooperate with one another any more. Meanwhile, I found this girl care too much more about appearance than about her job. At last, I had no choice but fired her.

 

In ordinary living, it is not external appearance but moral that we care about a great deal when we make friends. We make friends because we can help each other and we can share happy or sad things with them. Is a good-looking one who always intrudes upon others' privacies an ideal friend? Absolutely not!

 

Accordingly, I advise everyone to pay attention to his/ her appearances. But it is wrong to judge a person by external appearance.

沙发
 楼主| 发表于 2008-8-13 16:49:00 | 只看该作者
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板凳
发表于 2008-8-13 17:59:00 | 只看该作者

Um, no offense,do you reallize that one needs to write more than 300 words or so in order to be acceptable to the test raters and more than 400 words to reap an acceptable grade to oneself?

Well, in case you have not heard of the famous saying from Dai Yun(New Oriental School), one golden principle of independent writing is "the 长er the better". Although we can not expect this rule to be flawless, it is rather justifiable to reach the conclusion that with more words(nonsense excluded), one can develop his/her ideas more comprehensively and more thoroughly, thus making his/her work more agreeable to the raters judging eyes.

At any rate, the diction in your essay does show a decent mastery of this language, which is a great advantage of yours, given that many people may have to refer to dictionaries in order to comprenhend what you presented. Thus, from my perspective, you might need to work on the length problem, and try to gather more information and experiences about this test.

p.s. 新东方网络课堂对你会有点帮助, 如果你有足够时间。

地板
发表于 2008-8-13 22:19:00 | 只看该作者

没有楼上这么专业的评论

但是觉得还是很有特点的

尤其是第一段之后直接让步.很有感觉~比传统的五段式的第四段让步更直接

以上是个人观点

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