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一篇满分范文

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楼主
发表于 2007-11-9 13:42:00 | 只看该作者

一篇满分范文

再网上发现的. TWE5分的作文. 大家看看和它有啥差句.

这是185里面的一道题.

Who teaches you to walk? Who teaches you to speak? It is your parents who teach you to do
these basic things in your life. So don't you think that parents are the best teachers!
Firstly, parents know us very much. Parents give us life, and I think that we will spend large
amount of time with them. So they know our merit and demerit in details. Meanwhile, they will
help us to get rid of our demerit.


Furthermore, parents possessed many experiences. Since they are older than us, they have
experienced many things. Sometimes, they are just like our models. And as the saying goes:
"Example is better than precept." So we will unconsciously copy some of our parents' habits and
styles of behavior, i.e. we can learn many things from them.

Finally, parents will teach us everything. Since schoolteachers can just teach us knowledge from
the books, our parents can teach us everything. For example, I learn knitting, cooking and makeup
from my mother, while learn fixing leaky faucet from my father. They are the persons who
love me most, so they will teach me everything without reservations.

Just as the saying goes: "There is no place like home." And I think there is no teacher like our
parents. They are the best teachers in our life.

沙发
发表于 2007-11-9 20:51:00 | 只看该作者
很流畅,但是总感觉无论是篇幅还是句子的水平都和以前看到的满分作文差距比较大~~~~~~~看来ETS对于作文的评判的是多样化的
板凳
发表于 2007-11-12 06:16:00 | 只看该作者
同感,满分作文的水平就是这样吗?
“Furthermore, parents possessed many experiences. Since they are older than us, they have
experienced many things.”

“possessed”首先我就不赞同了,难道父母过去有经验,现在没有了吗?一般都用现在时比较合适吧?
在引文中,一眼可见的问题还有两个语意重复的单句。

不知道大家是否认同?
地板
 楼主| 发表于 2007-11-12 09:41:00 | 只看该作者

是呀. 我也很confuse. 这篇虽然流畅,可是真的是很easy写.

我们大多数人写的都不比这个差. 满分得不到,28分总该有了的. 难道ETS对我们有偏见.

 

5#
发表于 2007-11-18 14:13:00 | 只看该作者
不会吧,这都满分,我岂不是31分了??
6#
发表于 2007-11-18 14:19:00 | 只看该作者
满分?
7#
发表于 2007-11-20 04:22:00 | 只看该作者

开头结尾不错,逻辑上也很通畅,估计这是的满分的原因,虽然语法上有小错误,比如说a,an,the的疏漏,一些idiom用的也不地道,不过瑕不掩瑜

8#
发表于 2007-12-6 23:28:00 | 只看该作者

原来满分是这样拿到的阿!

9#
发表于 2008-1-21 14:10:00 | 只看该作者

这是满分作文???太扯了吧....

语言虽然流畅,可是很baby talk而且很口语.这.....拿满分,那我该拿满分的平方了.

10#
发表于 2008-1-21 14:10:00 | 只看该作者

这是满分作文???太扯了吧....

语言虽然流畅,可是很baby talk而且很口语.这.....拿满分,那我该拿满分的平方了.

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