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又写了一篇,请德克老师指点

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楼主
发表于 2008-4-4 09:35:00 | 只看该作者

又写了一篇,请德克老师指点

Supporters of technology say that it solves problems and makes life better.Opponents argue that technology creates new problems that may threaten or damage the quality of life.Using one or two examples discuss these two positions. Which view of technology do you support? Why?

It is not rare to see that TV and computers have flooded into our daily lives. Some people insist on that development of technology has provoked a series of problems, say various pollutions. The idea is strongly opposed by people who hold the idea that it is technology that makes life better, considering it allows for convenient communication and provides avenue to obtain knowledge in varieties of areas. From my perspective, I totally agree with the latter idea.

 

No issue is more crucial than the one that advancement of technology enables us to enjoy a convenient communication between friends, relatives, cooperators, etc. To give as a demonstration, Computers, invented in the 20th century, has revolutionized the way people communicate from two separate continents. The advent of E-mail, which supported by Internet technology, can be transported through an optic fiber in a few seconds. Therefore, telephone, another significant invention for communication, has never been a must for people to exchange ideas and e-mail provides a perfect option.

 

Convenience of obtaining knowledge is another chief and head reason I choose to put here. Among a multitude of inventions in the duration of technology development, TV, tends to be a prevalent way to have a fully comprehension of different aspects of the world. My favorite TV program is National Geography, one contains enormous types of knowledge from physics, archaeology to philosophy and psychology. People can easily be immersed into the magic power of technology, say, how skyscrapers with several hundreds of floors in New York were erected and support themselves with the help of cements and concretes. Thus, TV programs are often considered as an efficient way to have a better understanding of the world.

 

Though the advantages of technology has greatly benefit human ourselves, it has its own demerit. Say, radiation, emitted by radios, TV, computers has been proved to be hazardous to people’s health. And the ecosystem, to some degree, has also been damaged due to industrialization, basically resulted from the development of technology. Those examples have perfect proved the old saying we should never forget: Each coin has two sides.

 

Though the disadvantages of technology leads to are considerable, it cannot compete with the benefits it enjoys, when the two main reasons mentioned above are taken into consideration. People may be still unconvinced, but reasons I have analyzed could at least make them more aware of the various dimensions of the issue under discussion. In fact, not only do I prefer to develop technology, but also prefer to take measures to protect from damages to humans at the same time.   

 

沙发
发表于 2008-4-4 14:03:00 | 只看该作者

楼主写的比我的好多了,强

但是say作为插入语是不是有点太口语化了?改成as we (all) know 或者for example/instence 会不会更正式些?

结尾态度是不是有点太模糊了?你第一句既然表明了立场就应该在后面叙述中强化一下吧(个人认为)

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