下周考试拉,希望大家修改.TOPIC108

Topic 108

  When it refers to whether learning about life from family relatives and friends or personal experience, people’s opinions are divergent on such a controversial issue. From my own perspective, I believe that we should persist ourselves. There are several reasons to support this.

  First and foremost, whatever parents or friends, they are not ourselves. They can not imagine your difficulty from your stand. Although they may go through more trouble than us, especially our parents and teachers, we all have our special problem to solve. For example, when you  choose your major after graduation from the senior middle school, maybe you are in a dilemma. You are not able to make your decision. Also you may want a hand from your mom or dad. What a pity, they are not very useful. As a result of which they do not know well about their children enough, you are the one who are familiar with yourself most. What’s more, since the generation gap exist, the parents may make the decisions in their opinions.

  Besides, if you need helps from many of your friends , it is possible that you will be lost. Different people hold different views. At last, there are lots of thoughts in your brain which leads you to a new trouble. Every idea has its own advantages and disadvantages, you are difficult to choose. In that situation, you’d better make the decision through your private experience.

  Last but not least, the more people are reliable on others, the lazier people will become. Little by little, some persons, especially the youth, form the habits that they don’t think or solve the problems by themselves. Other companions’ thoughts and behaviors greatly influence them. It is harmful to foster the individual characteristics.

  However, we should make our decisions by our own, the advices from the parents and friends are valuable. Their opinions contain their experience which is wholly varied from ourselves.

  All in all, as the reasons mentioned above, we benefit more from personal experience. If we persist in that, we may create more bright future!

whatever parents or friends, they are not ourselves 这句话的语法是不是有点儿问题,感觉别扭

They can not imagine your difficulty from your stand第二人称的用法需要注意一些,最好换成our,us,we之类的．

总体感觉，从语法到用词到结构都不错的说。不过我也还没考过，水平还大不到这样呢．

祝考试顺利！