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麻烦大家给我批作文(TWE 27)

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发表于 2007-11-8 03:02:00 | 只看该作者

麻烦大家给我批作文(TWE 27)

11月17号考,现在好慌啊,准备一点都不充分,作文写得很糟糕,希望大师们帮忙修改!!!谢谢谢谢

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

 

Nowadays, there is a hot and important controversy centering on whether people should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy. Some people agree with that. However, other people don’t think so. As far as I am concerned, I would like to side with the former. Of the countless facts and reasons that can strengthen my viewpoint, I will present the most consequential and conspicuous ones here.

 

The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that most experience in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons in the future. As we all know, difficulties do not always bring us trouble. There is an old saying in China:Failure is the mother of success.” It tells us one truth that we can always gain useful information or helpful conclusion from difficulties. No one will enjoy doing the things full of difficulties. However, only the difficult things can help us gain valuable lessons in the future. If we all give up when we face any difficulties in our life, we can not be succeed in the future. For example, Edison, the famous inventor who is known worldwide, invented lots of things in his whole life. One of his most important inventions is light which is still used by us. Do you know how many times did Edison fail before he invented light? If he gave up inventing when he faced difficulties, can we still have lights to use? I am sure Edison did not enjoy inventions full of failure. But the point is that he insisted on inventing and gained lots of valuable lessons from failure. Eventually, his inventions had great impacts in the whole world. So, the conclusion is obvious that people should sometimes do things that they don not enjoy.

 

Furthermore, behind my preference lies an equally important fact is that doing things that you are not enjoyable can help you to be patient. No one can deny the importance of patience in 21st century. Only the person with great patience can be successful in the future. Doing the things you are not enjoyable does not mean that you should do them the whole life. It’s just a good chance to train you to be patient. A person can not always do the things he likes. For instance, everyone wants to have a good job in a big company or run his own business. When you graduate from school, few people can have the ability to make their dreams come true immediately. They should have to do some work they don’t like for quite a long time to gain some working experiences or accumulate enough fund to run business. Maybe they don’t enjoy the current work or situation, but it does teach them to be patient and to wait for the right time to be successful.

 

Admittedly, doing things that you do not enjoy sometimes also has its demerits. For example, it will make you unhappy. It can increase the pressure in your life. However, the advantages of it carry more weight than the disadvantages of it. The case of demerits is too rare and too weak to weaken my viewpoints.

 

In conclusion, despite some minor drawbacks, doing the things people do not enjoy sometimes is still very instrumental to us. It will benefit us not only in gaining valuable lessons in the future but also in helping us to be patient. Thus, it’s a safer and wiser way to choose to do things you don’t enjoy sometimes.


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发表于 2007-11-9 13:36:00 | 只看该作者

你的第2段主论段跑题了.

最好重写一下.

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