8。11考 练习作文 给各位挑语病练语法使用

半个月就考了，今天才

第一次写作文，还请各位高手狠拍啊，

先谢过了

 Topic:  some intensive English program in the United States offer a foreign student the option of living with an American family while he or she is studying abroad. Many students feel that such a home-stay program is a valuable part of their total learning experience. However, others may feel that such a plan offers little value. In a short essay, discuss one or two advantages of living with an American family and then state one or two disadvantages. Tell whether you are in favor of or opposed to the idea of home-stay. Give examples to support your opinions

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A home-stay program has different impacts on students with various background 、attitude and preference. So ,some of them appreciate it, considering it an useful experience in their study , while others may consider it restricting or time-wasting. Just as the old saying tells us : “ Every coin has two sides.”， a home-stay program definitely has its own advantages and disadvantages. And in my points of view, its advantages mainly consists of the opportunity to learn a culture more conveniently and the value brought by good nutrition and rest circumstances . Compared to the disadvantages such as waste of time, I believe its advantages are definitely overwhelming.

One of the major advantages a home-stay program can bring , is that you can get in touch with the vivid American culture by living with native speakers. For example, if you starts learning in UC Berkley, you undoubtedly need to learn all the courses set by your school, but that’s far from what's enough. You also need to study the entire culture, which plays an important role in your understanding in classes and also in socializing with your classmates,professors and many other people. For instance, there’re many idioms used between students as a convenience tool  .  If you lack of the background knowledge about the culture  , you may feel quite difficult to catch up with others’ meanings . Living with native-speakers , you won’t worry about that any more, for you can acquire help conveniently from your landlords.

   Another major advantages of a home-stay program may come from the food with high quality nutrition and accommodation in a tranquil environment. Definitely , all these two aspects lead to a good condition of health, which is the foundation of all your study and activities. Scientist have pointed out that  good nutrition not only benefit one’s muscles but also one’s brain. It can help the process of memorizing and analyzing, making them more efficient and fruitful . 

   On the other hand , a home-stay program has its disadvantage too . Most students may feel it is  a little bit time-wasting. If your resident place located 15 miles away from campus ,and will take about 30 minutes by bus ,  you have to spend nealy an hour on the road. Such an amount of time is obviously precious for most students. That’s why some students tend to live on campus, rather than in a landlord’s house. For them , every thing’s so convenient if they choose to live at school.

   All in all , I prefer living in a native-speaker’s house, rather than in campus. For me , health and the opportunity to communicate in depth with experienced native-speakers are what I cherish most. And once I  choose a house that’s not far from school , I will enjoy the advantages a home-stay program brings me and avoid its major disadvantages. Why not?       

另问：第一段是不是太长或太啰嗦了？ggjj多帮忙哈

楼主复制粘贴一下在ｗｏｒｄ里面，就可以看见好多语法问题罗

不过好长啊～～我打字好慢，３０分钟拼尽全力就打３００个字，好怕呵呵

打字快没用的..我打字就不慢...

关键是实力..

The peculiar fascination deriving from a home-stay program has never failed to appeal to me.Why some college students are prepared to tolerate the constant high ballble of voices in dormitory ,the poor-quality food on student service, for the dibious priviliage of living on campus ,such as the so-called convenince, is totally beyond me. See? It is as clear as the daylight that i hold the first point ,that is , it is better for students to participate in the home-stay programe.

  There are some reasons that would lend credence to my opinion.

  One of the most overlooked resons why students should take this plan is that ,in terms of culture ,it is living with native speakers that could offer the genuine cultural background. It is far from enough for a foreign student to acquire konwledge merely from the courses required by his/her university . For instance, every year countless stuents from various countries enter into US universities, although they possess quite different backgrounds ,religious beliefs,and life-styles, what invariably happens is that there is nothing to prevent one from understanding the contents of couse,however ,they always encounter difficulties when they communicate with their fellows after class .That imight be the problem related to culture.No-native students tend to be non-proficient in application of idiom ,which is the indispensable communicating tool in daily life. In view that , one should take part in the home stay programe in order to contact the indigenious American culture.

  Hundreds of years after the industrial revolution ,while a variety of advanced study tools ,such as pc computer,online courses,emerge so frequently that everyone has got quite used to their emergence, the ingredient in one’s study ,no denying,is just one’s health. Aiming to achieve astonishing feats in whatever study or carrer,one can not afford a failure in gaining a strong constitution.

Acting on the contetion that it is the health that is the foundation of study or work , the significance of adequte rest, essential nutrients are recognized by more and more students.

The nutritious food ,tranquil atmosphere for living ,which characterize a typical life in America ,might be the main incentives contributing to a prolification of participants .

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楼上用词有深度，长句用的很熟练。 惟有些punctuations and articles 须注意一下。再如，应用religions,而非religious;]

generally speaking, better than mine

but in nce3 lesson41, the end of  the first paragraph  has the same  sentencepattern