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题目是20世纪难以忘记的改变~~~~

With the revolution of technology and science, there are numerous change in twentieth century. Different people have different ideologies about change which is essential for human. According to me, however, I am inclined to TV as the most invention in twentieth century. There are numerous confidence, and I will provide some of them here.

  To start with, TV’s invention is essential for getting new and advantage information and new on account that TV can broadcast the news and introduce the new theory all over the world in time and people from every place can watch TV program conveniently now. Take my mother's life as example, she is 30-years old. When she was young, there was not own TV like now. And she can, also, not know about the weather next day which can learn about simply on TV today. So she often forgot bring umbular when she went to school.

  Further more, TV’s invention offer an opportunity for family to communication each other espial parents and their children. Everyone notices that there is gap between parents and children more or less recently ascribe to they have not same topic to discuss when they sit together. TV, however, solve this problem. I and my father often watch TV together every Sunday evening, for we all love football games. We also talk about the teams famous players and so on. During the discussion, I feel that my father became my best friend not only a parents is.

  On the other hand. It is certain that watching TV a long time is bad for your health such as eyes. But if you can deal with the relationship between watching TV and rest. TV is good machine think, for everyone to accumulate experience and knowledge.

  In a word, it is hard to image that if there are not TV in this world, how to get so newly and advantage information. Consequently, TV is one change that should be remembered about in twentieth century.

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