模考一篇作文，求拍（7.7）

因为各种乱七八糟的事——好久没写了，思路贫乏————7.7就考了，没底——

三十分钟，三百字出头，有点危险。之前都是写G作文的思路，担心ing——大家上来拍吧！！

Topic：a job that makes you earn more or a job that makes you happy?

When it comes to the issue of which is the more important part of a job, income or interest, different people hold different opinions. Some think that income is the most direct reason why we choose to work, while some others think that interest and personal satisfaction are things more important to working people. From my standpoint, the answer is quite obvious: money is an indispensable part of work; however, enjoyment from work is something more significant. The specific reasons will be illustrated as follow.

First of all, a happy work contributes a lot to the happiness of a person’s life. Because work takes so much time in our life, if we cannot get fun and enjoyment from work, the quality of our life will be undermined. On the other hand, money is something earned to make ourselves feel happy. If we lose happiness because we do a job that can bring lots of income but without enjoyment, we have to ask ourselves whether we misplace the cause and effect relation between happiness and money.

Second, it is a fact that many high income jobs are those sacrificing people’s goodness of life. For instance, investment bankers, a well-known rich class, have millions dollar income every year. They are usually admired by many business college students. However, according to a survey, many of them are not enjoying their work because of long term over time work and lack of sleep. In another word, they are earning money in expenses of their health, spare time and even family. Apparently, money cannot bring us everything and it is pathetic for a person to be unable to notice this point.

In a word, work is a big thing during our life. The terminal aim of life is to gain happiness and satisfaction rather than emotionless money. So I think people should definitely choose a job that can make themselves happy.

Second, it is a fact that many high income jobs are those sacrificing people’s goodness of life. For instance, investment bankers, a well-known rich class, have millions dollar income every year. They are usually admired by many business college students. However, according to a survey, many of them are not enjoying their work because of long term over time work and lack of sleep. In another word, they are earning money in expenses of their health, spare time and even family. Apparently, money cannot bring us everything and it is pathetic for a person to be unable to notice this point.

具体的句子偶水平不到，就不说了，偶要说的不对了，ＭＭ别笑话．

上面这一段偶觉得不是太好，因为要论证的分论点到后半部分才出来，并且没有什么例子来论证．要多点细节，举例才好．那个投行的例子展开一些是不是好点，还有偶觉得分论点写在段句，或者最起码在第二句是不是好一点

还有最后一段有点单薄了．

ＭＭ要考了，看一遍题库，想个大约２０题的提纲吧，偶想ＭＭ应该基础很好的，偶也帮不上啥忙了．

ＭＭ可以看两篇德克的猪帮大家改的作文．偶想会有帮助．

旧T要过期了，考个IBT，以防不时之需——

所言极是，我自己也觉得论点很单薄。。。