作文，求高手修改

不知道为什么，这几天作文越写越没谱，最后又回到了前天那个套路的状态，翻了翻OG的例文，又写了一篇，说实话，前30篇作文里的很多例子我都已经背下来了，但是这一次......大家看看吧，不见得多么强

Do you agree or disagree with the statement? People should only read books that are about real events, real people, and estabished fact. Use specific reasons and examples to support your anwser.

Due to the development of the literature, various types of books spring up in our daily life. Some people believe we should read the books concerning real events,for only the real things are meaningful. However, a lot of people state they prefer fiction, as it can relax them. Despite different opinion, personally, I am inclined to the fiction. I will try to demonstrate my standpoint in the following paragraph.

Firstly, in my opinion, the fiction also expresses something meaningful rather than nonsense which some people thought. For instance, my favourite book, Harry Potter, is extremely popular all over the word. Why? Because it combines magic with instruction. When reading the chapter that Harry and his friends have to be confronted Voldemort, the most fierce wizard in the world, I was shocked by the young boy’s courage and resourcefulness. What’s more, I understand the true meaning of friendship, courage ,and responsibility. According to the survey reported by China Daily, 89.4% adolescents who are the fans of Harry Potter have the same feeling while they read this part of the book.. There’s no denying that fiction can also teach people a lot of meaningful things as well as the book focusig on the real events.

Secondly, aside from the instruction, fiction, as many people state, could reduce our social and academic pressure. After several hours of working without a short break, people always enjoy reading fiction to forget thigs that bothered them, and to lose them in the fictional world. I am fond of reading several passages of Harry Potter after class. It could cheer me up and make me more concentrate on my study later.

To sum it up, since it can bring me both entertainment and instruction, reading fiction in my spare time is my favourite hobby instead of reading the so-called “real book”.

Due to the development of the literature, various types of books spring up in our daily life. Some people believe we should read the books concerning real events,(you actually don't need the comma)for only the(you can remove "the") real things are meaningful. However, a lot of people state they prefer fiction, as it can relax them. Despite different opinion(s), personally,(u don't need this comma) I am inclined to the fiction. I will try to demonstrate my standpoint in the following paragraph(we know what you are going to do, you can delete this sentence, instead, make more clear thesis statement).

Firstly, in my opinion, the fiction also(remove also) expresses something meaningful rather than nonsense which some people thought.(Unlike some people thought, fictions express something meaningful as they combine fantacies and substantiated realities that the authors experienced) For instance, my favourite book, Harry Potter, is extremely popular all over the word. Why? Because it combines magic with instruction. When reading the chapter that Harry and his friends have to be confronted Voldemort, the most fierce wizard in the world, I was shocked by the young boy’s courage and resourcefulness. What’s more, I understand the true meaning of friendship, courage ,and responsibility. According to the survey reported by China Daily, 89.4% adolescents who are the fans of Harry Potter have the same feeling while they read this part of the book.. There’s no denying(denial or it is undeniable) that fiction can also teach people a lot of meaningful things as well as the book focusig on the real events(fiction can bring people meaningfulness in life while some other books focusing on real events).

Secondly, aside from the instruction, fiction, as many people state, could reduce our social and academic pressure(Secondly, fiction, as many people state and aside from the instruction, could reduce our social and academic pressure). After several hours of working without a short break, people always enjoy reading fiction to forget thigs that bothered them (to assuage the apprehensiveness), and to lose them(losen themselves up) in the fictional world. I am fond of reading several passages of Harry Potter after class. It could cheer me up and make me more concentrate on my study later(I am fond of reading several passages of Harry potter after class, after that I am cheered up and able to concerntrate on study).

To sum it up, since it can bring me both entertainment and instruction(I think inspiration might be better), reading fiction in my spare time is my favourite hobby instead of reading the so-called “real book”.

Generally good content; however, you need to read into your essay a few more times to make it better.

thank you again!

mm对作文的见解挺到位的，by the way,你是一位老师吧！不然怎么每次都改得这么好。

感谢+佩服！！！！！！！！！！！！！！1

I am a college student studying in the United States actually.

I like correcting others' essays to improve myself.

难怪改得这么准

你也是从大陆考过去的吗？还是小时候就移民过去了？

我现在正攻TOEFL（看我的作文水平就知道了),好羡慕你啊

I got here since April last year.

Well, you obviously have strong suit of writing basis. Keep on practicing. You will do good!