(AI5)平生第一篇英语作文，请大家帮忙看看。还有9天考试

5. “All groups and organizations should function as teams in which everyone makes decisions and shares responsibilities and duties. Giving one person central authority and responsibility for a project or task is not an effective way to get work done.”

“所有的团体和组织都应该作为一个每个人都参与决定、分享责任和义务的团队来运作。给予一个人关于一个项目和行动的集中的权威和责任不是完成工作的有效方式。”  

Admittedly, no one can deny the basic fact that concentrating authority and responsibility on one person is a rapid way to get work done in some conditions. However, this alone does not constitute a sufficient support to claim because the rapid way does not mean the effective way. When one person hold central authority, he or she may make a mistake that lead the project or task to fail. It is widely acknowledged that success of the project is more important than speed. Examining the advantage and disadvantage that one person hold central authority and responsibility for a project or task , we can draw the conclusion that giving one person central authority and responsibility for a project or task is not an effective way to get wok done.

Instead, the important reason that can be presented to develop my position that more person generate more energy to take the work.. Different people have different ability , combined to finish a whole work. A good example that may be found in the case is football team-someone who is good at running can carry on shooting and others who are well skilled in controlling ball can hand down football. Just imagine what would be like if a football team has only runner. Hence, it is obvious that all operating as teams in which everyone makes decisions and shares responsibilities and duties is the productive method.

However, we should pay attention to avoid the case that number of team speed much time on negotiating and make negative interaction.

Given the reasons discussed above, which are corrected with each other can generate an organic whole and achieve a more persuasive conclusion. Now, we may safely conclude that sharing responsibilities and duties is the most effective means if we can avoid ineffective negotiation and reduce the negative interaction with each other.

真的是第一次用英文写东东，过程及其痛苦，远非“难产”能以形容，足足写了四个小时：（

而且还是用了模板的，基本上除了模板，其他一个单词都想不起来，超过5个字母的单词就有拼错的可能。

因为字数超过四百了，所以倒数第二段是实在不想写了。

写的超级简单的理由，不要笑偶，因为如果写复杂一点的，我就更想不出有什么单词可以用了。

还有10天，不，现在是15日了，还有9天就考试了。

该怎么办呢？接下来的9个晚上该怎么练习才能提高呢，4.5分我就心满意足了。

In practice, faced with the dilemma whether to make decisions and share responsibilities and duties to everyone or to give one person central authority and responsibility for a project or task, different people hold different views because of their distinct backgrounds. Some assert that sharing responsibilities and duties by all group numbers is the most accurate way to get work done, while other people believe that giving one person central authority and responsibility for a project abridge much time spent on negotiation. As far as I’m (I am) concerned, it is the more effective way that all groups and organizations can function as teams in which everyone makes decisions and shares responsibilities and duties if we can avoid ineffective negotiation and reduce the negative interaction with each other. My opinion can be greatly substantiated by the following discussions.

Admittedly, no one can deny the basic fact that concentrating authority and responsibility on one person is a rapid way to get work done in some conditions. However, this alone does not constitute a sufficient support to claim because the rapid way does not mean the effective way. When one person hold central authority, he or she may make a mistake that lead the project or task to fail. It is widely acknowledged that success of the project is more important than speed. Examining the advantage and disadvantage that one person hold central authority and responsibility for a project or task , we can draw the conclusion that giving one person central authority and responsibility for a project or task is not an effective way to get wok done.

Instead, the important reason that can be presented to develop my position that more person generate more energy to take the work. Different people have different ability, combined to finish a whole work. A good example that may be found in the case is football team-someone who is good at running can carry on shooting and others who are well skilled in controlling ball can hand down football. Just imagine what would be like if a football team has only runner.（不要让考官imagine，为什么不自己把what it would be like写出来呢？） Hence, it is obvious that all operating as teams in which everyone makes decisions and shares responsibilities and duties is the productive method. (这一句的意思表达不明确)

However, we should pay attention to avoid the case that number of team speed much time on negotiating and make negative interaction.

Given the reasons discussed above, which are corrected with each other can generate an organic whole and achieve a more persuasive conclusion. Now, we may safely conclude that sharing responsibilities and duties is the most effective means if we can avoid ineffective negotiation and reduce the negative interaction with each other.

第一次写作只要写完就是成功，虽然时间紧了点，不过一定坚持剩下几天每天一篇。考试的时候4.5分没问题的。

除了个别的拼写问题外，最好能再内容上再把话说得完整一些。能举例则举例，第一段可以引用一个谚语：what is the use of running if you are not on the right way. （German Proverb）

另外，第一段不要写那么长，明显使用了魔板的，而且第一段并没有任何实质的论证，考官想看到的是言之有物的文章，而不是套话。

推荐看一些范文，看其中论证的展开方式。

哇，谢谢版主。这么晚还在帮我改作文。

我会每天练的。

不过我看过一些范文，都觉得自己是肯定写不出那样的层次的。

怎么说呢，就是我觉得我的英语输出能力仅仅就是this is 、there are的程度：（

那就背一篇范文

反复的背，背到自己张口就说英文的境界

背一篇？

背哪一篇？

版主，这是休克疗法吗？

背一遍就够了？？？

因为时间不多了，背一篇就能掌握几个很好的句式阿。

考试的时候多用几种分数就会高些

今天又写了一篇。

不好意思，还是用模板了。大概被的太熟了，一开写就想到那几个句子，转不过来了。不过感觉比昨天用的顺了。

请再给看看，多谢了！！！！

11. “When someone achieves greatness in any field — such as the arts, science, politics, or business — that person’s achievements are more important than any of his or her personal faults.”

“当某些人在任何领域获得成功时，无论该领域是艺术科学政治还是商业，此人的成就比他或她的任何个人错误重要的多。”
    

In practice, faced with dilemma whether one person’s achievements are more important than any of his or her personal faults or one’s faults are more important than his or her achievements, different people hold different views because of their distinct backgrounds. As far as I am concerned, I believe that this issue is complex and controversial what has not universal answer. Under different conditions, we can draw the distinct conclusions. I assume that the most important judgment standard is the social influence taking by person’s achievement or faults.

Admittedly, no one can sure that he does not make any mistake in his whole life. So we can not negate person’s achievement because of his or her personal faults. Likewise, we can not ignore person’s error because of his or her achievements. For example, Mao, who released Chinese from aggression of other nations and became the first president of new Chinese, made more serious mistakes such as “great culture revolution”, which brought huge disease to hundreds and thousands people. Examining the faults and achievement of Mao, we hardly do not reach the conclusion that his achievements are more important than any his of faults. Are his faults more important than his achievements? I also do not conclude this issue.

Instead, when it comes to which one is more important, greatness or fault., the more appropriate standard is the social influence, the benefit drawn from person’s achievements and the disease taking from person’s error. If the benefit drawn from person’s achievement is greater than the disease taking from person’s error, we can point out that person’s greatness is more important than his or her fault. The same example discussed above, Mao , may be found in the case that judging the social influence of his greatness and fault we can assert that his achievement and error are equally important.

Given the reasons discussed above, we may safely reach the conclusion that we should evaluate a person by considering both of the faults or the achievements rather than by claiming one of them.