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发表于 2005-12-12 00:31:00 | 只看该作者

twe7 ,帮忙提提意见

7 how do movies or televisions influence people’s behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.



Recently the issue of how movies or televisions influence people’s behavior is hot and controversial. Some consider that movies and televisions bring positive influence to the people’s lives, while others probably insist that movies and televisions do harm to the harmonious relations between people. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the former statement . Among many kinds of reasons that can support my view, I will discuss the most important ones here.



The first plain truth, which would be obvious to everyone, is that movies and televisions largely broaden the fields of people’s eyes and improve people’ learning about everything in the world. It would be safe to say that it is movies and televisions that accelerate the diffuseness of advanced knowledge and technology. Take for example, millions of young people complete their high education through televisions. From this respect, movies and televisions are helpful for the development of our society.   



Another reason that can strengthen my standpoint is that movies and televisions entertain all people, enriching people’s lives with funny stories, humorous jokes, and beautiful scenes and kinds of information all over the world. A good example in this respect is that watching movies in the cinemas has become one of the most popular ways for people to relax in the weekends.



Admittedly, we do not denying the negative aspects brought about by movies and television.As is well known that since we have movies and televisions, families now have had less conversation than ever before. But only this cannot substantiate that movies and televisions do harm to the harmonious relations between people.


Consequently, from what has been discussed above, we may see that movies and televisions make people more knowledgeable and change people’s lives more abundant. So we may safely reach the conclusion that movies and televisions remodel people’s behaviors, influence the society and impulse the development of the world.
沙发
发表于 2005-12-16 02:24:00 | 只看该作者

Recently the issue of how movies or televisions influence people’s behavior is hot and controversial. Some consider that movies and televisions bring positive influence to the people’s lives, while others probably insist that movies and televisions do harm to the harmonious relations between people. As far as I am concerned, I agree with 似乎是说人的吧? agree with someone the former statement . Among many kinds of reasons that can support my view, I will discuss the most important ones here.>>


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The first plain truth, which would be obvious to everyone, is that movies and televisions largely broaden the fields of people’s eyes and improve people’ learning about everything in the world. It would be safe to say that it is movies and televisions that accelerate the diffuseness of advanced knowledge and technology. 直接用for example吧?Take for example, millions of young people complete their high education through televisions. From this respect, movies and televisions are helpful for the development of our society.   >>


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Another reason that can strengthen my standpoint is that movies and televisions entertain all people, enriching people’s lives with funny stories, humorous jokes, and beautiful scenes and kinds of information all over the world. A good example in this respect is that watching movies in the cinemas has become one of the most popular ways for people to relax in the weekends.


MM实力足够再写一个理由的。三个理由,一个让步,一个开头,一个结尾,6段是最完美的。


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Admittedly, we do not denying the negative aspects brought about by movies and television.As is well known that since we have movies and televisions, families now have had less conversation than ever before. But only this cannot substantiate that movies and televisions do harm to the harmonious relations between people.


Consequently, from what has been discussed above, we may see that movies and televisions make people more knowledgeable and change people’s lives more abundant. So we may safely reach the conclusion that movies and televisions remodel people’s behaviors, influence the society and impulse the development of the world.
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板凳
发表于 2005-12-20 14:01:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用三脚猫在2005-12-12 0:31:00的发言:

7 how do movies or televisions influence people’s behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.



Recently the issue of how movies or televisions influence people’s behavior is hot and controversial. Some consider that movies and televisions bring positive influence to the people’s lives(influence people's life positively?), while others probably insist that movies and televisions do harm to the harmonious relations between people. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the former statement . Among many kinds of reasons that can support my view, I will discuss the most important ones here.



The first plain truth, which would be obvious to everyone, (论点是不是不要这句好点?)is that movies and televisions largely broaden the fields of people’s eyes and improve people’ learning about everything(绝对化了) in the world. It would be safe to say that it is movies and televisions that accelerate the diffuseness  of advanced knowledge and technology. Take for example, millions of young people complete their high education through televisions. From this respect, movies and televisions are helpful for the development of our society.


  



Another reason that can strengthen my standpoint is that movies and televisions entertain all people, enriching people’s lives with funny stories, humorous jokes, and beautiful scenes and kinds of information all over the world.(这里做状语好象有点牵强,改为并列是不是好些) A good example in this respect is that watching movies in the cinemas has become one of the most popular ways for people to relax in the weekends.



Admittedly, we do not denying (deny)the negative aspects brought about by movies and television.As is well known that since we have movies and televisions, families now have had less conversation than ever before. But only this cannot substantiate that movies and televisions do harm to the harmonious relations between people.


Consequently, from what has been discussed above, we may see that movies and televisions make people more knowledgeable and change people’s lives more abundant(??). So we may safely reach the conclusion that movies and televisions remodel people’s behaviors, influence the society and impulse(propel) the development of the world.

总的感觉还要在论证上多下工夫,显得比较苍白点。

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