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With the increasing popularity of the Internet, the electrization of information has become an inevitable tendency,to gain knowledge from top universities has become possible. However,the importance of schooling still would not be replaced by the Internet.

It is true that with the help of powerful search engines and active social network sites,needed information and insight opinion from certain field expert has become much easier to access, but is it only the knowledge and advice that we need for our for our growing?

Schooling may seem more expensive and time consuming than learning at home, but the benefits of it are also obvious. A school is society in miniature, to gain academic knowledge is just one but not only purpose of go to school, other purpose including to  learn social skills and to form trustworthy relationships with schoolmate and teachers, which would have profound influence to their life.

Interaction,to feel,to touch,to see is the base of built a trusty relationship,which the Internet may never be able to offer. In addition, being in a competitive atmosphere, their potential abilities in academic studies are more likely be developed than at home alone,especially to those who would easily be destructed. Take myself for example, to prepare IELTS,I finished an essay, read 50 pages of a book in the morning at library,while I found myself end up with nothing completed that afternoon after I went home.I was sitting in front of my computer to search a meaning of a word, 2 hours later I woke up from the sorrow invoking by Korea TV show.

Last but not least,schooling provide physical exercises,on the contrary,learning at home,normally means sitting at one position and staring at the screen for hours.

Generally speaking, go to school is a wiser choice for one's development, not merely academically, as well as mentally,psychologically and physically.Learning at home on the Internet could be useful,but best as a supplementary way of schooling.

With the increasing popularity of the Internet, the electrization of information（不明白，楼主确认可以这样用就好） has become an inevitable tendency,to gain（两句话间没有连词，to gain 做主语吗？ 好像不可以吧） knowledge from top universities has become possible. However,the importance of schooling still would not be replaced by the Internet.

It is true that with the help of powerful search engines and active social network sites,needed information and insight opinion from certain field expert has become much easier to access, but is it only the（the only) knowledge and advice that we need for our for our growing?

Schooling may seem more expensive and time consuming than learning at home, but the benefits of it are also obvious. A school is society in miniature(不明白), to gain academic knowledge is just one but not only purpose of go（going) school, other purpose including to  learn social skills and to form trustworthy relationships with schoolmate and teachers, which would have profound influence to their life. 这句话读着很不通顺，楼主使用to gian academic knowledge 作主语吗？ 我明白想表达不是唯一的目的。用 A is not the only purpose 不就行了吗？ 同样没有连词。

Interaction,to feel,to touch,to see（不能这样表达吧，中文确实是这样表达。） is the base of built(buillding) a trusty relationship,which the Internet may never be able to offer. In addition, being in a competitive atmosphere（不确定可以这样用哦）, their potential abilities in academic studies are more likely be developed than at home alone,especially to those who would easily be destructed. Take myself for example, to prepare IELTS,I finished an essay, read 50 pages of a book in the morning at library,while I found myself end up with nothing completed that afternoon after I went home.I was sitting in front of my computer to search a meaning of a word, 2 hours later I woke up from the sorrow invoking by Korea TV show.

Last but not least,schooling provide physical exercises,on the contrary,learning at home,normally means sitting at one position and staring at the screen for hours.

Generally speaking, go to school is a wiser choice for one's development, not merely academically, as well as mentally,psychologically and physically.Learning at home on the Internet could be useful,but best as a supplementary way of schooling.

总的来说，我觉得楼主的用法还不够地道，准确。最后自己能够确定可以这样用
另外，感觉行文不太流畅。

Q:being creative,rather than carefully planning,is more often results in better solution.

Have you ever thrilled for a brilliant idea while had it procrastinated for half a year or, even worse, had never get it on the ground? Have you even annoyed that you feel surrounded by tons of work and had been busy all all day, yet had nothing done at the end of the day? Have you even been in the heart-broken situation that the avant-garded product your team had worked for years had been disposed because it fails to meet the market demands and result in sales failure?

If you have had such experience, you would know how important a plan is to achieve success.

Compared to a brilliant creative idea, a well planned proposal are generally more efficient to get a better result because a creative idea tend to focus on one aspect of the subject, yet various factors should been taken into consideration in terms of achieving success,otherwise there is a high possibility the effort that have been put on the project or product would be in vain or ,even worse, the company could be tremendously damaged by the failure,suffering from loss of excellent employees,threat of capital-chain broken as well as damaged reputation.There is a real example to note this opinion

.Likaifu,former CEO of Microsoft Research Asia, mentioned in his book <<You differs the world>> ,that he conducted a development of an advanced browser that were able to demonstrate 3D animation while others could just do 2D when as a product manager in a famous high-tech company SGI.However,because lack of precisely perceive of market demand ,they put the advance of technology and the satisfaction of scientific exploring priority instead of user experience,which cost them severely---the product,despite of its advance in technology,has been sold in few thousand dollars,and 183 engineers who are in the development team lost their job.

Further more,A good plan would reasonably dispute resources to focus on the priority, therefor the project is more likely been processed with expected pace. Thus, a thoughtful proposal is a key master to gain success.

It is true that being creative is important to some extent on the way to success. People who get too caught up in careful planning sometimes find themselves hard to make decision. They are looking for more and more information in order to make a well informed assessment, but in general,a specific plan would lead to high possibilities of a better solution.

should all teachers be required to take couses every five years to update their knowledge?

The reading passage cites the benefits of salvage logging.That it will clean spaces for healthy trees,decrease the possibility of the insects growing and increase jobs.However,the lecture professor stands in the opposite points for the following reasons:

First and foremost,she argued that the dead trees is not necessary to been removed,instead they should be left where they are to decompose so the soil can be enriched and become more suitable for new trees to grow.

Furthermore,not all the insects are harmful to the forest.There is a living example that the spruce bark beetles in Alaskan forest has get alone with the natural for hundreds years and the harmful insects are also a important part of the food-chain,which may be damaged by intentionally remove some parts.

Finally,the effect on job market prosperous mentioned in the passage is temporary and normally fitted by experienced outsiders.