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[求助]狂急。大家帮我看看我作文能打多少分阿?拜托了。

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楼主
发表于 2005-1-25 03:19:00 | 只看该作者

[求助]狂急。大家帮我看看我作文能打多少分阿?拜托了。

题目是。为什么group和organization在人们的生活中比较重要。

Group work has been come much more familiar to our school lives. As you may experience, recently, teacher are much more likely to sign group presentations or projects to us. According to my personal point of view, I quite prefer to do assignment with other group members rather than finish it by myself.        In the following paragraphs, there will be show a few reasons to support my opinion.

Firstly, i would like to discuss in here that why groups and organizations are a important part of a person's life.        The chief reason is your group member and you can get help from each other.        It is quite important that the ideas of you guys combined togther are much intensive rather than a idea of a single person. For instance, your group members are trying to slove a question in Physics.        You will solve it in your viewpoint, one of your group members will solve it in his viewpoint, and another of your group members will solve it in her viewpoint, and so on.Then how many different aspects of your solution will you get? Will you get even more aspects of your solution if you have done it alone? Obviously not!

Next, the second chief reason is that a group work can spend less time than a individual work. Think about if there is a project, and it need to cost 3 hours in total. We all know that if you are in a group you can save much more time. Because other group member can share part of the total work in time. Do not you think a group is exetremely        important to you? Working in a group is saving your time, which also means saving your life!

Finally, although organizations have almost same meaning with groups, they are larger and more organizational. When you join an organization, you can know several new friends who have same interests with you, or in the same work fields. In addition, an organization may arrange activities sometimes, such as parties or pictics. To some extent, it also fills your spare time with happiness.

Therefore, it is three chief reasons why groups and organizations have been an important part of someone's lives. Helping in your studies, saving time, and filling your spare time, and so on. Do not waste your time! Why do not you join in an group or an organization now?

谢谢了~~



[此贴子已经被作者于2005-1-25 8:07:48编辑过]
沙发
发表于 2005-1-25 04:34:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用jiuer_mia在2005-1-25 3:19:00的发言:

题目是。为什么group和organization在人们的生活中比较重要。


Group work has been come much more familiar to our school lives. As you may experience, recently, teacher are much more likely to sign group presentations or projects to us. According to my personal point of view, I quite prefer to do assignment with other group members rather than finish it by myself.  In the following paragraphs, there will be show a few reasons to support my opinion.


Firstly, i would like to discuss in here that why groups and organizations are a important part of a person's life.  The chief reason is your group member and you can get help from each other.  It is quite important that the ideas of you guys combined togther are much intensive rather than a idea of a single person. For instance, your group members are trying to slove a question in Physics.  You will solve it in your viewpoint, one of your group members will solve it in his viewpoint, and another of your group members will solve it in her viewpoint, and so on.Then how many different aspects of your solution will you get? Will you get even more aspects of your solution if you have done it alone? Obviously not!


Next, the second chief reason is that a group work can spend less time than a individual work. Think about if there is a project, and it need to cost 3 hours in total. We all know that if you are in a group you can save much more time. Because other group member can share part of the total work in time. Do not you think a group is exetremely  important to you? Working in a group is saving your time, which also means saving your life!


Finally, although organizations have almost same meaning with groups, they are larger and more organizational. When you join an organization, you can know several new friends who have same interests with you, or in the same work fields. In addition, an organization may arrange activities sometimes, such as parties or pictics. To some extent, it also fills your spare time with happiness.


Therefore, it is three chief reasons why groups and organizations have been an important part of someone's lives. Helping in your studies, saving time, and filling your spare time, and so on. Do not waste your time! Why do not you join in an group or an organization now?


谢谢了~~




个人看法:


1。 写得不错。不知道是不是卡时间写的。


2。 您往WORD里面放一下看看, 拼写错误不少。会影响得分的。


3。 如果没这么多TYPO, 5分差不多朝上。


4。 请您看看发贴格式要求, 修改下标题。


谢谢


板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2005-1-25 08:08:00 | 只看该作者
嗯嗯。多谢了~
地板
发表于 2005-1-25 08:34:00 | 只看该作者

..." href="http://forum.chasedream.com/dispbbs.asp?boardID=68&ID=63945&page=1">◆发贴必读◆关于TWE作文练习讨论的格式说明◆重要!


发贴格式请点击这个链接。


http://forum.chasedream.com/dispbbs.asp?boardID=68&ID=63945&page=1


考试区的良好气氛和备考环境, 需要大家共同的维护。 谢谢。


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