TWE167－－第三篇了，恳请各位前辈修改，希望能上5分，也希望大家提出意见－－多谢！

TWE167:A school has enough money. They want to buy either books or computers. What's your opinion?

      It is a controversial issue whether the school should buy books or computers. Depending on the personal experience, personality type and emotional concern, someone may think they should buy books for studying, on the other hand, some people may insist they should buy computers for getting more information. The choice, nevertheless, is not easy to make. As far as I concern ,I agree the later one is more advisable as the perspectives below.

      The essential reason can be seen by everyone is that computers can help the students study more effective. The computer, an advanced tool, is used for working and studying by more and more people. And the computers have also been more necessary in school than before. The most important point is the students can get the latest information which comes from all over the world, and the computer also makes the studying convenient and happy, it is not still a hard job, everyone can finish it easily. Furthermore, the students can not only chat with students who are excellent, and they can communicate with the experienced teachers as well .Gradually, the relationships between the students and teachers become closer, and they even be the best friends. in short, maybe there are a lot of different views concerning this topic, but in my part, I also would like vote for buying computers for getting more information.

      Another reason of my propensity for buying computers is it can be available for solving the problems of schools. Imagining there are so many jobs for teachers to do, such as the teaching, managing the class, talking with students and so forth, it is sure the teachers can not achieve them ,or done it well without the helps of the computers .So the computers can relieve their working loans, and they have the spare time to do other things to benefit the students. Moreover ,in aspect of teaching, owing a computer is helpful, the courses for classes under the help of computers are more vivid than their counterparts without the computers .Hence, It is no doubt that buying the computers is a wise choice for the school.

     The last but not the least, It is obvious the books are cheaper than the computers, and almost every student can afford to buy the books liked by them, however, the computers are too expensive to occupy for the students. Even someone does not know what the computers are. Although the expenses are large for schools, they are valuable for the students whose eyes emit the bright shine for the knowledge .Taking account of all these factors and recognizing facts, to be frank, I would prefer the school to buy the computers.

     In conclusion, as the views mentioned above, it is true that school should buy the computers ,everything has double aspects, whether someone considers it is good choice or not, I insist it is correct, and it will be proved by the passed time.     

语法错误太多了。 难上5分。

我的个人看法：

Depending on the personal experience, personality type and emotional concern-这句可能本身问题不大，是从一本托福书上的模板上弄过来的。问题是，人家问你的不是个人问题，而是public issue,这个depending就不太合适。至于语法错误，自己可以先耐心点改一下。一般达到30min可以写出300-350 字以后，自己要花30-60min改，再花30min看别人怎么改。坚持写10-15篇，一般都可以上5分。

感谢大家的意见,我对语法错误进行了以下修改,不知还有那些错误,希望前辈多多指出,多谢!

TWE167:A school has enough money. They want to buy either books or computers. What's your opinion?

      It is a controversial issue whether the school should buy books or computers. Depending on personal experience, personality type and emotional concern, someone may think they should buy books for studying, on the other hand, some people may insist they should buy computers for getting more information. The choice, nevertheless, is not easy to make. As far as I am concerned, I will agree the later one is more advisable as my perspectives below.

      The essential reason can be seen by everyone is that computers can help students study more effectively. The computer, an advanced tool, is used for working and studying by more and more people. And computers have also been more necessary in school than before. The most important point is students can get the latest information which comes from all over the world, and computers also make the studying convenient and happy. The studying will not be a hard job, everyone can finish it easily. Furthermore, students can not only chat with students who are excellent, and they can communicate with the experienced teachers as well .Gradually, relationships between students and teachers will become closer. In short, maybe there are a lot of different views concerning this topic, but in my part, I also would like to vote for buying computers for getting more information.

      Another reason of my propensity for buying computers is it can be available for solving the problems of schools. Imagining there are so many jobs for teachers to do, such as teachings, managing the classes, talking with the students and so forth, so it is sure teachers can not achieve them or done it well without the helps of the computers .Clearly, the computers can relieve their working loans, and then they will have the spare time to do other things to benefit students. Moreover, in the aspect of teaching, owing a computer to teachers is helpful, and the teaching under the helping of computers will be more vivid than their counterparts without the computers .Hence, it is no doubt that buying the computers is a wise choice for schools.

     The last but not the least, It is obvious books are cheaper than computers, and almost every student can afford to buy the books liked by them, however, computers are too expensive to occupy by students. Even someone does not know what the computers are now. Although expenses are large for schools, they are useful for the students whose eyes emit the bright shine for the knowledge .Taking account of all these factors and recognizing the facts, to be frank, I would prefer the school to buy the computers.

     In conclusion, as the views mentioned above, it is true that school should buy computers, but everything has double aspects, whether someone think it is a good choice or not, I insist it is correct, and it will be proved by the passed time.     

哪位好心人再帮我看一下,改过自己认为的语法错误,不知还有那些错误和不足,希望大家指出,多谢了!