大家帮忙修改一下（不要笑我）

写得很难，自己改来改去，还是觉得不如意，哎，水平太差，希望哥哥姐姐们指点一下呀，下个月就考了

In our fasting world, the medium develops so fast that full of almost all our life. Due to that this reason, the people’s behaviors are often influenced by the medium, especially by movies and television. These effects from movies and television almostalways lead change the way we think our thinking and even cause the negative reacting.may lead to some undesirable results.(表述生硬）

First of all, children are the group who is most easily affected by television programs. Because children often lack of knowledge and experience, they usually imitate the behaviors of others such as actors in the movies whom are admired by children. Spider Man, the most popular movie, attracted many children. A lot of parents discuss that their children often have simulated the leading actor to spread web and even want to fly between two buildings since they saw the movie.It would be very dangerous to the children if they really to actualize that activity do that(想象你在讨论这个问题时，说中文也不会用这样的词。如果是将日常生活的例子，说明浅显的道理，个人认为过多的学术化词汇会使文章不流畅）

Second, television is one of the most major critical ways influencing people’s behavior. Nowadays all of us could（虚拟语气） hardly imagine how to live without television, so that people’s life is often directed by television program. I can think no better illustration of the idea than the examples of the advertisement. More and more advertisements use the movie stars or sport starts as their representatives to attract the consumers and usually they can gain successful effectiveness, because most people can’t be resistant to this kind of seduction.

Finally, some horror movies and television programs make people so nervous that they often make a lot of mistakes on their work or study. In my personal experience, I can hardly go into the dreamland several nights after I saw see any horror movie or television program. （现在也如此，用一般时）In the following days, because of my bad psychosis, I can’t concentrate on the study in class, so that I usually got the worse score. On the other hand, the comedy can bring much pleasure to people and make them happy, thus they will be full of energy to face the challenge of their life.

In sum, the movie and television bring a lot of changes to our life and some of them have directly affected people’s behavior. These influences not only affect the children’s growth and results of people’s work and study, but also stimulate the people’s behavior of consumption.

楼上的是GMAT语法吧，托福作文还没有这么严格。不过最好是替换掉啦。