ISSUE 65 -- (第二篇）（作文不好求大神指点）

narcismq · 发表于 2012-10-5 17:38:31

TOPIC: ISSUE65 - "There are two types of laws: just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws."
WORDS: 471TIME: 00:30:00DATE: 2012-10-5 14:50:24
In the statement above, laws are classified into two types of law: just laws and unjust laws. The speaker then assumes that it is every individual's responsibility to obey the just laws and to disobey the unjust ones. In my perspective, there are undoubtedly certain limitations in the current law system worth being fighting against. However, considering that justice can be defined by various criteria, it would result in disorder if everyone performing their own law system.
Admittedly, our law system has certain defects and the correction of these requires our desire to fight against it. If people do not want to take action, then voices won't be heard let alone correcting these unreasonable clauses in the law system. People may claim that law is now functioning and progressing well generally and individuals needn’t waste their time to find fault in it. This plausibly claim is actually inherently wrong. The doubt and criticism toward the law is the most effective driven force to the development of a law system while it is each individual who lend power to those doubts and criticism. When people don’t have antipathy to unreasonable laws, the enact of a better law would be futile.
However, the claim that law can be categorized by just or not is inappropriate. Every individual, affected by their different educational and cultural background, can develop their own special criteria toward this issue. It is Considering a society in which people can feel free to disobey the rules they don't like. Thieves could insist that their victims deserve to be punished for their wealthy living standard. However those victims feel they are actually innocent: They work hard for years to get what they possess and they have right to choose their way of living. The society would be completely messed up without any valid discipline or order. Without the law to guarantee this order, how could we expect the society to have a promising future.
As far as I concern, the law itself is always progressing, on its way to better serve the society. Yet there surely exists some unreasonable deficiency despite that law established is always out of the concern to benefit the most. Generally we should obey all the laws, otherwise the function of law to ensure a better organized society is impaired. When some clauses prove to be irrational, it is better to adopt more appropriate measures, including a widely debate or research on how to correct them, instead of hastily disobeying them.

The real essence of law, to a certain extent, is to balance the competing interests. Although the rationality of law still worth conferring, it is too cursory to disobey it based on the understanding of each individual. The best way to promote the progress of law is to offer suggestions or condemn rather than disobeying them.

普渡哥 · 发表于 2012-10-6 13:06:15

结构不错。

narcismq · 发表于 2012-10-6 19:24:49

TOPIC: ISSUE 41--The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.WORDS: 469 DATE: 2012-10-6 14:48:42
Who could the greatness of individuals be decided by, their contemporaries or those who live after them? In the statement above, the speaker asserts that only those who live after them could play the role. In my perspective, this claim is too extreme. Although people live after will have a better understanding of an individual's greatness, it unfairly neglects that contemporaries can judge through other resources and might even obtain more adequate and insightful materials to help making judgement.
The statement’s inference that people live after can have a better perspective is partially sound. Due to the limitation of theirtime, contemporaries may have suffered certain restriction in making an objective evaluation. During the long history of slavery, black novels are often seen with colored eyes. Political factors could affect the critic's assessment towards the writers, thus the comment is often a compromised one. In this circumstance, the opinion given by their contemporaries is biased and unconvincing. Additionally, as time gone by, people would probably come up with a better evaluation system and could make the judgement through a more comprehensive understanding. After all, Copernicus, the founder of the heliocentric ordering of the plants, had waited for long before his discovery is considered great work. His sufferings can be ascribed to both the limitation of the understanding of his time and the restriction from the people in power.
However, the statement attempts to completely deny the possibility for contemporaries to decide the greatness of individuals. It fails to consider that people of the same time can actually have a comprehensive understanding of the individual's greatness through comparing the work of the predecessors or the contemporaries. Scientists like Hawking, whose greatness is acknowledged by the contemporaries, is categorized as great person for his discovery about the universe outweigh numerous scientists devoted to this fieldand before. He has proven his greatness already. So how could we deny this undoubtedly prominence? The answer is absolutely negative. Besides, the contemporaries can have the first hand material in evaluation while people might only obtain limited inadequate or tampered information about the person to be decided. Therefore, contemporaries can sometimes better decide an individual’s greatness.
Considering the complexity of criteria to decide a person’s greatness, I believe that both the contemporaries and the people who live after can be capable of deciding whether an individual is great or not. They define greatness from different perspectives. People who live after ,due to their progressed evaluation system and level of understanding, can tell the hidden greatness in many circumstances. Yet contemporaries have a more adequate information thus can decide a person’s greatness through comparison with predecessors and contemporaries .
When deciding an individual’s greatness, different criteria can be adopted. People from different time has their advantageous and disadvantageous. There is no need to make an absolute definition telling which one does better.

narcismq · 发表于 2012-10-6 19:25:18

ISSUE 9---In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
WORDS:429TIME: 00:30:00DATE: 2012-10-6 16:25:37
In the statement above, the speaker claims that the past achievements within a certain field is indispensable in making a significant contribution in that field. In my perspective, the statement is generally reasonable. In numerous cases, past achievements are always the foundation of making a revolutionary contribution. The only problem is that being strongly influenced by past achievements is not an appropriate attitude toward research in certain fields.
Emphasizing the beneficial impact past achievements have on making significant contributions is generally sound. Take a look at the human history, many contributions are building upon past achievements. Issac Newton , according to many of his biographies, depicted himself as an ordinary man standing on the shoulder of a giant. This delineation vividly tells us that the great contribution of Newton is building upon the wisdom of his predecessor. To a certain extent, his creation can be seen as the highly generalized work of the past.
In fact, as far as I concern, great works always depend on certain past achievements directly or indirectly. The progress of any field of endeavor requires a systematic supports. Mostly new theories are proposed on the basis of the former study. This reliance does exist even when it seems inconspicuous. One example is the discovery of the new discipline of how the planets go in the space. They might propose a completely new idea distinct form predecessors, while actually they are able to conceive new hypotheses because they obtain the basic understanding about the universe from their predecessors.
However, this statement implies that we should be strongly influenced by the past achievements, which I feel inaccurate. I believe that is not a rational attitude to be at first being strongly influenced by the past achievements when conducting a research. If we were strongly affected by the previous knowledge, we would first assume that they would be no improvements towards the very field and would undoubtedly accept the formal ideas ,thus our creative and critical thinking would surly be impaired. Consider the great achievement of Copernicus, which proposed the heliocentric ordering of the planets. This is a once advanced great achievement. But if researchers later at first were strongly influenced by this viewpoint, how could they ever be able to find out the more essential fact.
Actually, I basically agree with the speaker on the significance of past achievements in making great contributions in a certain field. The problem is that we cannot hastily apply it on every possible occasion. Having a critical attitude toward previous achievements is of great help in making revolutionary contributions.In order to make significant contributions to in a certain field of endeavor, I believe that consulting past achievement is critical and mostly beneficial. It would be better to maintain a rational attitude.

narcismq · 发表于 2012-10-6 19:27:18

今天写的两篇希望能有大神再批改一下。本人作文超低分但求各种拯救

[issue] ISSUE 65 -- (第二篇）（作文不好求大神指点）

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