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[作文互改] 求各位亲指教~(living person不能被视为hero,觉得挺难的)

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发表于 2012-9-2 19:44:38 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
It is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero.




Considering the rapid development of media, heroes are exposed to the public a lot, ranging from their public behaviors to private lives. And together with more and more people having rather strict eyes while judging heroes, the heroes really live hard to be “heroes”. However, I fundamentally disagree that it is impossible for anyone to be considered as a hero by the society. Though being a hero takes pains, there would be certainly someone who can burden such title.


Admittedly, too much exposure by the media has a negative influence on “heroes”. Heroes could be great because of their ambition, and similarly, based on such ambition they could be fairly awful. Nixon, once an honorable American president, was defeated completely by the coverage of Watergate Scandal. Overnight, he was deprived of the title “hero”, and became rebuked by the world. The ambition eroded him, and the media destroyed him. Without the mass media, we might never know the scandal behind, and still respect the once “hero” as a forever national hero. The media makes heroes hard to belie their weaknesses.


Nevertheless, the true hero could be forgiven and accepted even bothered by bad news. Clinton is a lively example. He brought America the Internet Age, and gave American people a nation of property. But such an excellent hero was reported as a lewd guy, who did some undisciplined behaviors to his beautiful secretary. This scandal nearly ruined his family and his political life. However, after a period of censure and critics, the public finally forgave Clinton, and even accepted him as a good American president, playing a key role in the rise of American economy. Real heroes though with wrongdoings or scandals, would be still be understood and regarded as human “heroes”.


Meanwhile, the exposure of heroes makes people consider “heroes” more rationally. No matter how successful they are, after all, they are humans. Human is a kind of creature that would make mistakes. Knowing this, when we find heroes make some peccadilloes, it does not mean they cannot be “heroes” any longer. It just means heroes are not perfect either, just like us. A person never has to be perfect to be a hero. A girl who does badly in her lessons, but rescued all her classmates during an earthquake, is a hero. A doctor, who is nitpicky to his subordinates, but saved several lives in the plague, is a hero. The one who could make contributions to the nation or even the world would be respected as our “hero”.


In a nut, heroes could be surely affected by the mass media, whereas how they would be judged does not depend on whether they are impeccable or not. Masses of exposure enhance people’s tolerance, and provide them a clearer acquaintance of heroes as well. Aware of the heroes’ contributions and wrongdoings, it would be easier for the society to figure out real heroes. And that is why I hold the opposite view of the statement that any living person is no longer possible to be considered as a hero.
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沙发
发表于 2012-9-3 03:36:04 | 只看该作者
感觉LZ写的还是很给力的,至少从思路上我觉得很好。觉得不太好的地方可能是中间举例子的那两段,给出自己的论点缺少直接的分析论述,对具体例子的分析论述并不能完全代表对分论点的分析,毕竟例子就是例子,没有普遍性
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2012-9-3 09:09:45 | 只看该作者
谢谢竹林中人!那请问像这样的文章怎么举例会比较好呢?因为举出来的实例都是个例,我的想法是:题目观点是不可能有,那我就用反证法,证明还是有这样的人的。不知道这样对不对?请问,您说的分论点的论述和对例子的论述分别指什么呢?中间那两段的结尾部分算不算呢?请指教哈^_^
地板
发表于 2012-9-3 17:38:47 | 只看该作者
例子越具体越好,这是OG上范文的一个很大特点。所谓对论点的分析就相当于是议论论证吧,比如说,媒体对名人的影响,到底是一个什么样的影响过程,说清楚。对例子的分析就相当你写的,举例子的同时结合例子也有说理性的话。你的中间两端的结尾部分算的,但如果在紧接着分论点后面也有就更好了,这也是AW作文的一个特点,对观点进行一个解释性的说明或者强度。
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-9-3 20:19:26 | 只看该作者
好的!拜谢~我去修改一下~
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