5.27 issue 39 interest&jobs 求猛拍!!!!!

749896499 · 发表于 2012-5-14 20:50:18

39. College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

提纲：
总观点：大学生在兴趣和现实压力中寻找平衡
1.   兴趣很重要
1.1   兴趣更有可能使才能发挥到最佳水平
1.2   兴趣能够支持人们在困境中支撑下去如考古学家 archeologists 没有兴趣很难在如此困难的环境下坚持下去
1.3   如果将自己的学习和研究领域仅仅用就业前景框起来：个人而言人生没有乐趣；社会而言，可能因为一些在特定领域的人才的流失损失创新精神与活力
2.   所有压力中生存的压力是最需要优先考虑的
2.1 如果只考虑兴趣不考虑就业前景的话，很有可能会面对就业困难

3.   结尾：
3.1 对个人而言，人们不得不在理想和现实中利用所有的信息进行权衡取舍；
3.2对政府和社会而言，可以靠着一套完善的机制财政出资在大学设立特别项目来资助确实有天分和兴趣的学生来发展他们的兴趣

Issue：

It may be true that as college students, we are caught between our interest and jobs. While pursuing what we like sounds riveting and cheer us without rational sense, just as what the statement shows to us, we must take our future into consideration, if we want to survive in the society. That is to say, we should keep balance between interest and survival pressure by using all the information we can get to make a decision.

It is a truth universally acknowledged, that interest maximize one’s capacity and protential. Interest is something in our mental that always keep us be in a great excitement and never feel tired even if keep doing for long time, something that just is a kind of satisfactory in mental and something that we extremely enjoy anytime, everywhere. When someone enjoy doing something, surely it is much likely to come up with good ideas, to deal with matters exerlently, to creat a large numble of methods or inventions, and to minimize the errors. For example, great interst in music, Beethoven created so many symphonies surprising the world; longlasting passion derived from interest, Xu Beihong kept drawing only horses attracting the world; interested in maths, Chen Jingrun worked out Goldbach Conjecture astonishing the world. It is interest that keep them creating, drawing, and calculating. Only if the mental satisfactory matches the behavior, could someone achieve the peak of hills in their field.

In addition, interest can strongly support someone when he/she is in trouble. In terrible environment, or in bad condition, people easily tend to give up if nothing give they a reason for not. And interest is the reason why they perservere to it, for depriving from interest are their curiosity to know what may be happened next and a believe that they can handle it. Archeologists, an kind of experts fiiled with mysteries, are hard to keep exploring in that wet smelly air, unknow insects or poisonous chemical material probablely prevent common people from such tough condition, if they are not intersted in archeology at all. Interest supples an inner strgenth that hard to get rid of, to support a person to keep explore and finally reach success, and this is the basis the statement relies on.

Furthurmore, it comes into being a kind of failure for life if students learn courses limited for jobs hunting. Even if a person can find a lacking fun job that can make much money, he/she will do boring work everyday and have no much time to develop what he/she really like, and he/she cannot enjoy his/her life filled with trifle. Being caredful for nothing, people are have no enough expects for life, what can we imagine is that a unhappy person lives a dispointed life without fun. For scociety, creativity and energy may be lost because of lacking enthusiastic and active talents in some pecific fields, a bad news for scocity developing. In other words, lacking interest impede human’s and scocity’s progress.

However, having realized that food, clothing, and shelter are the fundamental human need, college students should take the career prospects into consideration in some degree. Admittedlly, interst leads to a joyful life, but anything else pales in importance compared to surviving, after all, what a starving person would prefer a bad meal to a chance to develop his/her interest? Accordingly, it must be admitted that only a fundamental condition are met, can people do have abilities to do else, and that it is appropriate to assign a higher priority to these fundamental human need than to interest. And the fundamental conditon to survive varies in diferent people, what depends on the individuals needs. One may think a hamburg everyday and a house that will not let rain in is enough, and another person may think steak and villa cannot meet his/her need. It all depends. So after the diferent fundamental needs are sastisfied, people can develop their interest furthest as well.

To sum up, even if making such choice is difficult for everyone, college students should keep balance between interest and career prospects. After student ensuring meet the fundamental human needs, developing interest could maximize students’ value achieving in scocity. Moreover, builing a perfect machanism, government and scocity can make a fund to set up a institution in college to supports a few of tallent student, but it is a topic far beyond the statement that should be discussed carefully.

淡淡飞过 · 发表于 2012-5-15 09:04:35

It may be true that as college students, we are caught between our interest and jobs. While pursuing what we like sounds riveting and cheer us without rational sense, just as what the statement shows to us, we must take our future into consideration, if we want to survive in the society. That is to say, we should keep balance between interest and survival pressure by using all the information we can get to make a decision.

I really like your Chinese outline. It is very good.

I think the first sentence is not quite clear. "our interest and jobs in what?"

"as" should not be put with "what"

The second sentence seems too long. I got lost when I was half a way through

I think the issue is talking about what students should consider when they are choosing their majors. however, in your first paragraph, you never mention the word "major" or "the field of study." I think you need to go closely with the topic.

749896499 · 发表于 2012-5-15 11:42:54

第一段改成：
It may be true that as college students, we are caught between our interest and presure of reality. While just as the statement showing to us, pursuing what we like sounds riveting and cheer us without rational sense; we must take our future into consideration, if we want to survive in the society. That is to say, we should keep balance between interest and survival pressure by using all the information we can get to make a decision.
有没有更清楚一些？

确实第一段没有很好的切题，把When someone enjoy doing something, surely it is much likely to come up with good ideas, to deal with matters exerlently, to creat a large numble of methods or inventions, and to minimize the errors. 改成Whenstudents enjoy their majors, surely it is much likely to come up with good ideas, to deal with matters exerlently, to creat a large numble of methods or inventions, and to minimize the errors in the field of study.
第二段在In addition, interest can strongly support someone when he/she is in trouble. 之后+ It is indisputable that students will run into a stone wall whaterver their majors are and whether they are interested in them. And in terrible........
应该有所改善了吧

谢谢指导!!!!! 感激不尽!!!!请尽量拍!!

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-5-15 20:19:27

对兴趣着墨很多，对lead to jobs写的相对少了，比如说，如果所有都进了那些所谓的容易找工作的行业，会不会造成新的就业问题。

749896499 · 发表于 2012-5-16 21:01:37

是写着写着有点跑偏了，些兴趣优点的两段可以合成一段，是应该再加上假设性如果都进入好找工作的行业这一假设性情况~~~ 谢谢

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