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发表于 2012-4-17 00:29:53 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
The following appeared in a memo to the board of directors of a company that specializes in the delivery of heating oil.

"Most homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last heating season, that region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, and climate forecasters predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes are being built in the region in response to recent population growth. Because of these trends, we can safely predict that this region will experience an increased demand for heating oil during the next five years."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.







There are some logical errors among this memo.

Firstly, the memo mentioned that it was 90 days with below-normal temperatures last years in this region, and the forecasters predicted that the ‘bad weather’ will continue for several years. On the one hand, this memo did not mentioned the weather before last year, and there may be much more than 90 days’ below-normal temperatures before last year, which means last year’s weather is warmer than before though it was typically cold, and the warmer winter will go on next few years, so the cost of heating oil will decrease. On the other hand, even if last year’s weather was colder than before, there is no significant evidence can indicate the forecasters’ prediction is authority, so the assumption of the increasing of heating oil next several years is contradictable.

Secondly, we do not know what did ‘typically cold’ meant. There are no exactly data shown how much was the degree of the average temperatures and how much it less than the normal temperatures, maybe there are only one or even less than one degree under the normal-temperatures, people can hardly feel of that. So this evidence is insignificant to prove the conclusion what the company made.

Thirdly, there are many ways to increase the temperature inside the room. The memo did not show how many families will use some new technology to heat their room instead of the heating oil, and we do not know which way the new built homes choose to use, maybe these new-built families choose a newer and more efficient way to gain heat, and then they spread this technology to whole region, what caused a decreasing demand of heating oil, the disproof the evidence what the memo gave. ---30mim

The memo made a conclusion rudely with some logical leak, and these errors have probability cause a bad ending with increasing the supply of heating oil.
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发表于 2012-4-17 09:40:02 | 只看该作者
did not mentioned the weather 时态和动词形式混乱,建议用does。。
关于第一点,我觉得你质疑的并不到点子上,毕竟题目说了是below-normal ,也就是去年是已经比正常情况低了,所以不宜再去质疑过去几年的变化,另外关于天气预报这事儿,你不能再去它的权威性,而应该质疑的是准确性,毕竟天气预报再权威也会有出纰漏的时候。
第二点第三点质疑的是对的,但你的语言需要有条理的组织下。
最后我想可否加一点,就是到了冬季,因为天气会变得更加严寒,而使得很多人跑到暖和的地方去过冬。
最后提一点意见,提纲以后也写上来吧,这样我们可以较快的知道你的逻辑是否清晰,再就是你的段落安排和段内句子组织,有必要加强,前后衔接连贯,环环相扣,步步推进,这样会更有说服力
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