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[作文互改] ISSUE 6 写的不是很在状态。。求您PIA 求您PIA

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发表于 2012-3-20 21:55:40 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
周围环境有点吵,写作超时了!不过还是完成了。。求您PIA俺。。谢谢。。

I totally agree that a country should require all the students to take the same national curriculum before going to a college. Why? Because each of us should develop comprehensively and coordinately.

Firstly, we must make it clear that what the purpose of study is. It is to help people adapt to our society, have the ability to work for our society, and develop themselves comprehensively. Then how to be a whole man? To take a comprehensive curriculum is essential. Our society need a group of people with abilities of different fields, so a country should order all the students to take a serious of similar subjects, including math, physics, arts, P.E. and so on, and this will be useful for the students to get a wide vision and comprehensive development.

Also, countries’ offering the same curriculum to students can also help students to find their hobbies. After learning various kinds of subjects, students will easily find a field in which he or she is interested. The hobby they found may become a source of energy and it may lead a person to a bright future which suits he or she best.

What’s more, a country could supply all the students a platform to compete fairly by offering the same national curriculum, and this will be useful for a country to establish a better competition atmosphere.

At the first paragraph we have emphasis many times that one should develop comprehensively, so why? If he or she puts any effort to only one field, isn’t it more efficient for one to achieve success? The answer is no. As we all know, our brain is divided into two parts. The left part is connected to the logic, while the right part is related to the arts. And the latest research had drawn a conclusion that these two parts can help to improve each other. It means that playing the violin could help a physical scientist to be more thoughtful, and doing analyze writing can make an artist more inspired. Each of us knows that Einstein is a giant in the field of science, but few of people have known about that he played the violin so well. By learning all kinds of subjects, a man could make both the left brain and the right one work faster and faster.

From all the reasons above, we could easily find that students taking the same curriculum can help them develop more comprehensively, work more efficiently, and improve their brain. In a word, a country should ask all the students to take the same national subjects until they enter a college.
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沙发
 楼主| 发表于 2012-3-20 23:15:18 | 只看该作者
有木有~~跪求。。。
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2012-3-21 09:02:07 | 只看该作者
自己上去。。
地板
发表于 2012-3-21 13:38:58 | 只看该作者
你的想法是不错的,只是你的内容有些不充实,你考虑到一个东西一方面的好处的时候也要尽量把它的不好的地方怎么避免给写出来,比如国家统一的课程安排,有助于教育公平和竞争,但另一方面,可能因为课程庞杂,反而影响人们专注于自己感兴趣的科目,这种情况怎么避免等等,一边倒的观点尤其要注意这点。
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-3-21 15:52:11 | 只看该作者
噢好的,谢谢斑竹~~回去改改
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