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[issue] 新G issue2 跪求拍 心里没底啊

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发表于 2012-3-4 11:21:34 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.


In my view, deeper and comprehensive studies of characteristics of a society, not only of the cities but also of the rural areas, should be made to have all-sided insight into a society.


Admittedly, major cities, widely regarded as the symbol of the society and the nation, reveal the full view of the nationwide outlook and customs of its citizens to a large degree. The high buildings and the busy traffic indicates, more or less, some of the characteristics of the cities' rapid developing achievement. Furthermore, as the political and economic centers, major cities are so attractive and are likely populous. A mount of educated people assimilate into the major cities, holding their clear universal values and even the pursuit for chasing their dreams and perfection. In study of characteristic of the working passions, it could be more effective and representative to delve among the urban people.    

In fact, however, it is one-sided to study the major cities only. To exhibit the best aspect of the nation, governments pay a lot of budget on designing and developing the cities. As a result, the booming cities, could not represent the conditions of other areas, but the blueprint of the dreaming future instead. So it is entirely possible, and even likely to overestimate and overbeautify the characteristics of the society if only the cities are surveyed. For instance, could the circumstances of the New York City and the Washington D.C., be hasty representations of the slums and Indian reservations and plantations? Moreover, Bangkok, the capital city of Thailand, favored by the tourists all around the world on the surface, masks the frequently subtle political conflicts in the society.

Besides, the conclusion is too generalized. Areas, apart from the cities, may significantly display the reality. At first, unlike the urban people who grow up in the environment where traditional and original cultures and values have considerably been assimilated by nonnative ones, the rural people keep more to traditional concepts , values and customs, unique to their own society, which are more valuable when studying the society. Particularly,  in some nations, the population of rural ones is much larger than that of the urban ones. China, for instance, is an agricultural country with the almost 1 billion of rural population, a larger percentage of total number. Although the booming cities like Beijing, Shanghai and thriving businesses in the major cities show the social conditions to the outside world at present, they are the minority. More comprehensive , realistic and deeper insight into a society would be gained preferably if research and observation among the masses were conducted in the rural areas rather than in the major cities.

In sum, cities and countries respectively embody values and customs of a society. The conclusion is bound to be faulty and unreasonable if we generalize a conclusion without taking distinctive conditions into consideration. To get the credible conclusion, we should consider both of them instead of focusing on the cities only.
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沙发
发表于 2012-3-5 23:18:24 | 只看该作者
1.文章内容还行,语言表达也不错。
2.建议第一段不要写的这么简短,没有展现出你对这个题目复杂性的认识和分析,并没有引出下文的纲领性句子,而只是一个观点性的句子
3.最后补充一点,关于这个题目,关于一个社会的主要特点,你可以在第一段的分析中概括定义一下,这样对你下文的展开有一个限定从而能很具体地展开并具有深度。还有就是你可以提升下自己的认识档次,比如说城市现在越来越趋同,而乡村的传统也遭到现代的侵蚀,使得社会扁平化、简单化了,而是去了多元化
板凳
发表于 2012-3-7 12:23:20 | 只看该作者
问题是major cities, 作者似乎理解成了cities...
地板
 楼主| 发表于 2012-3-7 15:21:23 | 只看该作者
感谢中人!深度上以前没想过这么多

不过还是不太了解如何写好开头,不知道有没有好的例文(作文5.5上只是用中文解释了如何写好开头,北美的风格又太多,我自己不知道哪些可取) 再次感谢
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-3-7 15:23:40 | 只看该作者
问题是major cities, 作者似乎理解成了cities...
-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/3/7 12:23:20)



请教普渡哥,major的意义如何体现呢?或者说除了major cities 对 rural parts以外,还有哪种对比可以被用来论证呢?谢谢!
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发表于 2012-3-7 16:33:54 | 只看该作者
问题是major cities, 作者似乎理解成了cities...
-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/3/7 12:23:20)




请教普渡哥,major的意义如何体现呢?或者说除了major cities 对 rural parts以外,还有哪种对比可以被用来论证呢?谢谢!
-- by 会员 jdef1028 (2012/3/7 15:23:40)

major应该主要是一线城市吧,比如中国的北上广,美国的NY
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-3-7 22:29:10 | 只看该作者
问题是major cities, 作者似乎理解成了cities...
-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/3/7 12:23:20)





请教普渡哥,major的意义如何体现呢?或者说除了major cities 对 rural parts以外,还有哪种对比可以被用来论证呢?谢谢!
-- by 会员 jdef1028 (2012/3/7 15:23:40)


major应该主要是一线城市吧,比如中国的北上广,美国的NY
-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/3/7 16:33:54)

那还需要把一线城市和其他城市单独拿出来对比一下么
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