虫子要拿下T——一口啃掉综合写作!!!

klllun · 发表于 2012-7-27 13:57:22

亲们，猛拍吧~虫子又回归了。28号再战！

klllun · 发表于 2012-7-27 13:58:43

坚持写作文，虫子要回归！

klllun · 发表于 2012-7-27 20:56:34

The passage talks about the problem about the decrease of Torreya taxifoha, and gives three solutions to it. In the lecture the professor disagrees with all the methods that provides in the reading passage. Instead, she point out that the possibility of achieving the ultimate goal is faint.

To begin with, in resolving the problem, the option is to rebuild the Torreya in the location where they used to be established. However, the professor would like to claim that due to the global warming, the expected effect wouldn’t be appeared. On the contrary, the climate in the northern part of Florida, which is very not too dry or hot, is now quite drier than that before.

Secondly, the passage provides another option is that Torreya could immigrate to an entirely new habitat, which is very far from the Florida microclimate. Does it work? Definitely, no! Based on the examples that side effect of immigrating balck noka tree, if Torreya change its location to the totally different one, it would hold the potential problem whether or not this action will do harm to the environment of the new location.

Finally, it’s obvious that the passage holds a seemingly unbelievable solution that preserves the Torreya in reaserch center. The speaker gives her reasons that the situation is not suitable for plant to survive. Not only do the decrease of the capability to disease, but also the capacity of the research center is not enough to keep a large amount of Torreya. Thus, the way to protect Torreya from extinction is unconvincing.

In all, the professor disagrees with the methods provided in the reading passage.

写的不咋的，要多多练习的！求狠批啊，谢谢！

klllun · 发表于 2012-7-27 20:57:18

上一个TPO18的原文~
In the 1950s Torreya taxifoha, a type of evergreen tree once very common in the state of Florida, started to die out. No one is sure exactly what caused the decline, but chances are good that if nothing is done, Torreya will soon become extinct. Experts are considering three ways to address the decline of Torreya.

The first option is to reestablish Torreya in the same location in which it thrived for thousands of years. Torreya used to be found in abundance in the northern part of Florida, which has a specific microclimate. A microclimate exists when weather conditions inside a relatively small area differ from the region of which that area is a part. Northern Florida's microclimate is very favorable to Torreya's growth. This microclimate is wetter and cooler than the surrounding region's relatively dry, warm climate. Scientists have been working to plant Torreya seeds in the coolest, dampest areas of the microclimate.

The second option is to move Torreya to an entirely different location, far from its Florida microclimate. Torreya seeds and saplings have been successfully planted and grown in forests further north, where the temperature is significantly cooler. Some scientists believe that Torreya probably thrived in areas much further north in the distant past, so by relocating it now, in a process known as assisted migration, humans would simply be helping Torreya return to an environment that is more suited to its survival.

The third option is to preserve Torreya in research centers. Seeds and saplings can be moved from the wild and preserved in a closely monitored environment where it will be easier for scientists both to protect the species and conduct research on Torreya. This research can then be used to ensure the continued survival of the species.

kchszy061ban · 发表于 2012-7-28 22:17:25

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

The passage talks about the problem about the decrease of Torreya taxifoha, and gives three solutions to it. In the lecture the professor disagrees with all the methods that provides in the reading passage. Instead（also，连接上句，或者就把句号去掉和上句连成一句）, she point out that the possibility of achieving the ultimate goal is faint.

To begin with, in resolving the problem, the option is to rebuild the Torreya in the location where they used to be established. However, the professor would like to claim that due to the global warming, the expected effect wouldn’t be appeared. On the contrary（这里用in addition 或者moreover什么的，因为它和上句不是相反的而是和第一句相反额）, the climate in the northern part of Florida, which is very not too dry or hot （in the past）, is now quite drier than that before.

Secondly, the passage provides another option is（可以不要） that Torreya could immigrate to an entirely new habitat, which is very far from the Florida microclimate. Does it work? Definitely, no! Based on the examples that side effect of immigrating balck noka tree, if Torreya change its location to the totally different one, it would hold the potential problem whether or not this action will do harm to the environment of the new location.

Finally, it’s obvious that the passage holds a seemingly unbelievable solution that preserves the Torreya in reaserch center. The speaker gives her reasons that the situation is not suitable for plant to survive. Not only do the decrease of the capability to disease, but also the capacity of the research center is not enough to keep a large amount of Torreya. Thus, the （this）way to protect Torreya from extinction is unconvincing.

In all, the professor disagrees with the methods provided in the reading passage.

整体很好了，就是觉得用词方面提高下就好。个人意见哈，多多交流额

klllun · 发表于 2012-7-29 23:20:31

多谢kchszy061ban~我会努力的！用词这个是个长路啊，嗯嗯，谢谢指点

晨依Jacqueline · 发表于 2012-7-30 17:11:00

加油哇~~~

klllun · 发表于 2012-8-11 22:00:25

TPO9——还希望请教一下综合的写作的关键是不是就是大概在每一段，引用一句文章的关键句的改写，然后融入听力中反驳或者支持的内容就可以了...其次就是需不需要结尾段落啊？
The topic of the lecture and the reading passage is about whether the new fuel will reduce the disadvantages which the inter-combustion engine has. Though the author of the reading claims that the fuel-cell engine is so good that perhaps it will take the place of traditional one, the professor in the lecture disagrees with the ideas.

To begin with, it is more likely to get the source of fuel-cell engines than that of internal-combustion engines. Because the hydrogen, which the new engines need, is abundant, it could derive from the natural gas and even water. But the professor points out that it is unconvincing when the water at the state of the pure liquid is useful. In other words, the problem to employ the hydrogen will constrain the various sources and finally make this point meaningless.

Secondly, based on the saying that the world's pollution could be decreased, the conclusion of the effectiveness on the fuel-cell engines is that the by-products could be limited. What a pity that the author did not take the whole manufacture process into consideration. Due to the purification process, which needs to deal with the burning coal and oil, it might create much more pollution than expected the new fuel will save during the use.

Last but not least, there is no warranted for the cost efficiency. According to the professor, she asserts that the manufacturing process would need an expensive mental, which would be not in demand if made the traditional fuel. So the raw material will lead in the higher cost if the fuel-cell engine were adopted to take the place of the old one. Nevertheless, the reading passage gives the example that the fuel-cell engine will require just half fuel and could go to the identical distance. The savings will not compensate the additional cost on raw material.

kchszy061ban · 发表于 2012-8-12 16:39:02

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

The topic of the lecture and the reading passage is about whether the new fuel will reduce the disadvantages which the inter-combustion engine has. Though the author of the reading claims that the fuel-cell engine is so good that perhaps it will take the place of traditional one, the professor in the lecture disagrees with the ideas.

To begin with, it is more likely to get the source of fuel-cell engines than that of internal-combustion engines（你怎么把它当独立作文写了）. Because the hydrogen, which the new engines need, is abundant, it could derive from the natural gas and even water. But the professor points out that it is unconvincing when the water at the state of the pure liquid is useful. In other words, the problem to employ the hydrogen will constrain the various sources and finally make this point meaningless.（听力的点还是有点少，这样就会是失分点额）

Secondly, based on the saying that the world's pollution could be decreased, the conclusion of the effectiveness on the fuel-cell engines is that the by-products could be limited. What a pity that the author did not take the whole manufacture process into consideration. Due to the purification process, which needs to deal with the burning coal and oil, it might create much more pollution than expected the new fuel will save during the use.（这个还是不错，不过建议写细节了）

Last but not least, there is no warranted for the cost efficiency. According to the professor, she asserts that the manufacturing process would need an expensive mental, which would be not in demand if made the traditional fuel. So the raw material will lead in the higher cost if the fuel-cell engine were adopted to take the place of the old one. Nevertheless, the reading passage gives the example that the fuel-cell engine will require just half fuel and could go to the identical distance. The savings will not compensate the additional cost on raw material.（这个只是把这种金属很expensive，然后汽车发电需要它，而便宜的替代品的发现还遥遥无期）

一点就是说的很笼统而不是具体，改下就好了。

klllun · 发表于 2012-8-12 21:45:28

TPO10
不知道会不会自己的东西过渡加工了一点点呀~

The main idea of the dispute is about the factor which caused the decline of the sea otter. According to the passage, the author points out that compared to the predator effect, she thinks that the environmental pollution leads to the decrease of the sea otter. However, the lecture disagrees with it. And the professor gives the following three reasons.

First of all, the professor says that the no otter on the shore is so strange. And then she provides an assumption that if the otters were not hurt by the predator, there should be a lot of otters on the shore which lives there freely. In fact, there is nothing remain they could find.

Secondly, it is the author's idea that the number of the sea mammals like seals and sea lions along the coast is plunging the same time. Thus, this phenomenon supports the main conclusion of the reading. On the contrary, the professor gives the new clue that it is the orca which could change its diet due to the limited preys that are large enough for it and become the hunter to make the mammals disappeared. In other words, the decrease of these animals could not blame on the environment, but this consequence should be attributed to the hunters.

Last but not least, based on the reason before, the lecture would be in favor of the predation factors compared to the environmental one because the uneven locations of the otters. For example, if the otters were in the unaccessible place, their number will not shrink. And the orca is so large that the entrance could be constrained. On the contrary, if they not live in the shallow, rocky place, they are more likely to contain a limited number because the hunters.

虫子要拿下T——一口啃掉综合写作!!!

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