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025 It has recently been announced that a large shopping center may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer

Whether building a large shopping center or not is a hot topic in our neighborhood. There are many people who think building a large shopping center is good, but others consider that building a large shopping center is not very good. If I would face to the question, I would probably agree with the former. In the following discussion, I would like to reason and provide evidence to support my viewpoint.

No issue is more important than the one that a large shopping center will bring much convenience to people in our neighborhood. In a large shopping center people could buy almost everything they need: food, clothes, CDs, or even home appliance. They don’t need to drive from one place to another or go outsider their home town to buy commodities any longer. Furthermore, most shopping centers now have coffee bars or tee houses. When people get tied, they could take a break and have a nice cup of coffee or tea there. So in a large shopping center, what people could get is not only goods but also pleasure of consumption.

Creating job positions is another chief and head reason that I have chosen to put here. It is no better illustration that can prove the view, namely a large shopping center may recruit a lot of employees in our neighborhood. Many jobless people can fill in the positions such as cashier, salesperson, accountant, etc in the shopping center. What’s more, restaurants or cinemas around the large shopping center may also expand their business and enroll more employees as a large sum of customers are attracted here by it. As a result, the jobless rate in our neighborhood will drop and people will have more money to spend.

Superior as building a large shopping center is, however, it also has its own disadvantages, such as possible traffic jam in our neighborhood. Nevertheless, the merits of building a new shopping center carry more weight than those of disadvantages. So the most striking conclusion is obvious.

To sum up, given reasons discussed above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and  thus become more persuasive, we can safely arrive at the conclusion that building a large shopping center in our neighborhood is better. In fact, not only do I prefer to build one shopping center, but also prefer to build such kind of centers as many as possible.

No issue is more important than the one that a large shopping center will bring much convenience to people in our neighborhood. In a large shopping center people could buy almost everything they need: food, clothes, CDs, or even home appliance. They don’t need to drive from one place to another or go outsider (outside？)their home town to buy commodities any longer. Furthermore, most shopping centers now have coffee bars or tee houses. When people get tied, they could take a break and have a nice cup of coffee or tea there. So in a large shopping center, what people could get is not only goods but also pleasure of consumption.

Creating job positions is another chief and head reason that I have chosen to put here. It is no better illustration that can prove the view, namely a large shopping center may recruit a lot of employees in our neighborhood. Many jobless people can fill in the positions such as cashier, salesperson, accountant, etc in the shopping center(放在前面是不是更好？). What’s more, restaurants or cinemas around the large shopping center may also expand their business and enroll more employees as a large sum of customers are attracted here by it. As a result, the jobless(unemployment) rate in our neighborhood will drop and people will have more money to spend (the purchasing power of people will increase,与and前面句式平行)

Superior as building a large shopping center is, however, it also has its own disadvantages, such as possible traffic jam in our neighborhood. Nevertheless, the merits of building a new shopping center carry more weight than those of disadvantages(those 指代什么？merits?). So the most striking conclusion is obvious.

To sum up, given reasons discussed above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and  thus become more persuasive, we can safely arrive at the conclusion that building a large shopping center in our neighborhood is better. In fact, not only do I prefer to build one shopping center, but also prefer to build such kind of centers as many as possible.(有歧义，not only do I...不仅我愿意，言下之意是别人也愿意，而不是想表达的“我不仅愿意”)

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谢谢，爱无伤MM，很受启发，偶等下空下来，该一下，你再看看.

Whether building a large shopping center or not is a hot topic in our neighborhood. There are some people who think building a large shopping center is good, but others consider that building a large shopping center is harmful (not very good). If I would face (face to) the question, I would probably agree with the former. In the following discussion, I would like to reason and provide evidence to support my viewpoint.

No issue is more important than the one that a large shopping center will bring much convenience to the residents (people) in our neighborhood. In a large shopping center people could buy almost everything they need: food, clothes, CDs, or even home appliance. They don’t need to drive from one place to another or go outside (outsider) their home town to buy commodities any longer. Furthermore, most shopping centers now have coffee bars or tee houses. When people get tired (tied), they could take a break and have a nice cup of coffee or tea there. So in a large shopping center, what people could get is not only goods but also pleasure of consumption.

Creating job positions is another chief and head reason that I have chosen to put here. It is no better illustration that can prove the view, namely a large shopping center may recruit a lot of employees in our neighborhood. Many jobless people can fill in the positions in the shopping center such as cashier, salesperson, accountant, etc. What’s more, restaurants or cinemas around it may also expand their business and enroll more employees as a large sum of customers are attracted here by the shopping center. As a result, the unemployment rate in our neighborhood will drop and the purchasing power of people will increase.

Superior as building a large shopping center is, however, it also has its own disadvantages, such as possible traffic jam in our neighborhood. Nevertheless, the merits of building a new shopping center carry more weight than disadvantages. So the most striking conclusion is obvious.

To sum up, given reasons discussed above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and  thus become more persuasive, we can safely arrive at the conclusion that building a large shopping center in our neighborhood is a good idea. In fact, not only do I prefer to build one shopping center, but also prefer to build such kind of centers as many as possible （无伤MM，这句话，我仔细的想了想，觉得是没有歧义的，因为这是倒装句，还原的话的就是 In fact, I not only prefer to build one shopping center, but also prefer to build such kind of centers as many as possible，请指教）

偶改了下，请NN指点，这文章怎么才能上5分，另外两个理由段够么，是不是要3个？

I am not saying that you are gramatically wrong. However, here are some sentences that make me feel not very comfortable.    

Whether building a large shopping center or not is a hot topic in our neighborhood. There are some people who think building a large shopping center is good, but others consider that building a large shopping center is harmful (not very good). If I would face (face to) the question, I would probably agree with the former. In the following discussion, I would like to reason and provide evidence to support my viewpoint.

Whether to build a huge shopping center in our neighborhood is a hot topic recently. Some people support this plan, while others are not sure it is a good idea. As long as I am concerned, I think to build a shopping center is wonderful. I would like to illustrate my point of view in the following paragraphs.    

No issue is more important than the one that a large shopping center will bring much convenience to the residents (people) in our neighborhood. In a large shopping center people could buy almost everything they need: food, clothes, CDs, or even home appliance. They don’t need to drive from one place to another or go outside (outsider) their home town to buy commodities any longer. Furthermore, most shopping centers now have coffee bars or tee houses. When people get tired (tied), they could take a break and have a nice cup of coffee or tea there. So in a large shopping center, what people could get is not only goods but also pleasure of consumption.

Creating job positions is another chief and head reason that I have chosen to put here. It is no better illustration that can prove the view, namely a large shopping center may recruit a lot of employees in our neighborhood. Many jobless people can fill in the positions in the shopping center such as cashier, salesperson, accountant, etc. What’s more, restaurants or cinemas around it may also expand their business and enroll more employees as a large sum of customers are attracted here by the shopping center. As a result, the unemployment rate in our neighborhood will drop and the purchasing power of people will increase.

Superior as building a large shopping center is, however, it also has its own disadvantages, such as possible traffic jam in our neighborhood. Nevertheless, the merits of building a new shopping center carry more weight than disadvantages. So the most striking conclusion is obvious.

To sum up, given reasons discussed above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and  thus become more persuasive, we can safely arrive at the conclusion that building a large shopping center in our neighborhood is a good idea. In fact, not only do I prefer to build one shopping center, but also prefer to build such kind of centers as many as possible （无伤MM，这句话，我仔细的想了想，觉得是没有歧义的，因为这是倒装句，还原的话的就是 In fact, I not only prefer to build one shopping center, but also prefer to build such kind of centers as many as possible，请指教）

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My suggestion is: to write a 模板 for yourself. Do not copy such things from any websites or whatever.