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A good
teacher is more important than good parents

As
children is the hope of future, our family, society, nation focus on the
progress of their growing. Furthermore many scientists, educational experts are
exploring the best way to bring up our kids with broad knowledge and a good
character. Who is more important among teachers and parents? People's opinion
diverge on this issue. From my point of view, I convince that a good teacher
outweighs good parents, and this can be proved by the following persuasive
facts.

First and
foremost, teachers are more professional on teaching than parents. All of the
teachers especially these in primary school are been trained specially, so they
know how to arouse kids' interests, when to encourage them and what to teach to
them. Meanwhile, many parents in rural area where most people had no chance to
go school in the last 20th Century are illiteracy. Therefore how could they
teach their children without the help of teachers.

Besides,
it is revealed in a recent survey conducted by CCC(Children's Care Center) that
85% of kids from 6 to 10 have a better relationship with teachers than with
their parents. A overwhelming children would like to follow teachers'
instruction while they betray their parents' willing. So I can safely draw the
notion that kids can learn much better in the school than at home.

Matching
the above two reasons is another vital factor, some parents coddle their kid.
This can be aptly exemplified by a student in my class who had stayed with his
parents for 19 years before he came to this university. Away from his parents,
he don't know how to wash clothing, by a train ticket, cook a cup of coffee and
so on. Without the basic survival skill, learning knowledge from text book is
no meaning.

Above all
, I have supported the statement that a good teacher is more important than
good parents.

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我觉得这篇写得很不错，虽然个中有些错别字，同义转换用得不错，各段起承也做得好，值得我学习的地方挺多的．