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题目:Is face to face communication better than other types of communication

While many  modern communication methods as telephone, email,letter are more convenient for people, in my opinion face to face communication is the most important yet essenceial  way between people .Because we can not only hear what others said ,but also see their eyes and feel their feeling ,all of these would shorten the distance and increase understanding between two speakers.Face to face conversation could also convey some complex feeling through body language , specific tones of voice or even a nice embrace.

The first and most advantage that face to face communication has over other methods is that it can express or deliver the main idea from one person to another .For example , a sender send an email to his leader about his thought of a new product ,the receiver may be confused about some of the information in it and this will result in a waste of time.But if the sender has a conversation with the leader face to face ,the misunderstanding will soon be solved throught the vivid explanation of the sender .

Someone may think with the new technological communication tools such as MSN ,ICQ,conversation based on the video could also be easy for people to express complex feelings.But I will still argue that ,words on the computer screen or voice from the amplifer can not convey some cadence tone ,video thought a pc camera can also not transmit the humorous talking style or the sadness from our best friends ,who are really need someone to give him/her the shirt of your back.

Finally, in some special occasions like business conversation ,family union, get-together with your boyfriend/girlfriend, face to face communication is necessary .Hand shaking is important after a business affair, a hug or a kiss could improve the feeling between the lovers.No amount of body language can convey the excitement of a hand shake with a friend ,and no number of words can communicate  the comfort embrace from a lover.

没人给说说啊

ha-ha, point holder, I have roughly went through your composition, have some personal feelings on it:

firstly, don't know why you choose this topic.

there are so many subjects present to you to select, and unluckily you got this topic - this is more or less impacts my idea in communication ways selection. so, here I keep in silence, because my opinion is thousands miles away from yours -:8P.

secondly, face to face talk make nonsense sometimes. you can put this scenario in your consideration： if the physical geography is not allowed for you to arrange an you promoted face-to-face talk, then what you can do, or in other words, what you can do? everybody knows the telecom related devices mergers in the market variety day by day, and the cost suffering will not be a headache. if those alternative will still help you to consolidate your subject, then I just can stay a away and wow you are such a rich person, because you don't mind to pay a big amount to do a simple thing- just making a face to face talk.

based on above thesis, I still not words for you, sorry buddy.

finally. I am also educated in China, and now the English is not my big issue, but we still fight for the exam, because the World needs.

first time logged on this forum, and first time comment other people's writing with my not proper English. sorry words for you, guy I cannot give you much help.

全篇还不错啦，楼上的有点挑骨头啊，这种文章本来就没有对错，只要自己站得住脚，向着哪一边都是没有关系的。

我发现几个小问题：第二行essenceial拼错了；第二段第二行send应该是sends，因为举例是用一般现在时的；第三段第二行But I will still argue that，will应该可以不要，因为这里不用表示将来，前面的may和这里的动词都是表示现在的；第三段第三行thought似乎也是拼错了哟；第三段最后一行the shirt of your back不知你想表达什么，我没有看懂。

另外，倒数第二行lovers似乎用得不对，这是我在美国的朋友告诉我的，她说lover通常指情人，这个我不是很确定，大家可以讨论一下吧。

首先非常感谢楼上两位的细心的点评...

不胜感激!

选题只是看了185的讲解之后,随便选了一篇,没有注意这种文章有什么不妥....

望大家推荐一些初学者练习用的适合的题目

想到个例子,抱怨一下下:
  During remote communication such as in a Messenger, Skype or QQ converstion, we can only hear each other without any facial expression or gesture language, which are helpful to transmit meaning. While in a face-to-face conversation, this kind of problem doesn't exist. For example, just about 1 hour ago, when I was doing the Listening Section. I heard a professor in a certain lecture often stop in his or her class, and repeat some of the words that the professor had just said. Why? Because the professor realized from students' facial expressions that they didn't totally understand what they had heard. And this kind of repetition ensured that all the listeners could understand. While on the contrary, when I was listening the lecture, there were also some words I didn't catch. But saddly I cannot see the professor speaking. If I could, I would probably be able to guess some of the professor's words by reading his of her lips. Also if the professor could see me, there would be another halt during the lecture because of my puzzled facial expression.

ha-ha, point holder, I have roughly went (gone) through your composition, have some personal feelings on it:

firstly, don't know why you choose this topic.

there are so many subjects present to (for) you to select, and unluckily you got this topic - this is (X) more or less impacts my idea in communication ways selection (selection of comm ways). so, here I keep in silence, because my opinion is thousands (thousand) miles away from yours -:8P.

secondly, face to face talk make (makes) nonsense sometimes. you can put this scenario in your consideration： if the physical geography is not allowed for you to arrange an (a) you promoted face-to-face talk, then what you can (can you) do, or in other words, what you can do? everybody knows the telecom related devices mergers (emerge) in the market (marketing) variety day by day, and the cost suffering will not be a headache. if those alternative(s) will still help you to(X) consolidate your subject, then I just can stay a(X) away and wow you are such a rich person, because you don't mind to pay (paying) a big amount to do a simple thing- just making a face to face talk.

based on above thesis, I still not words (do not have comments) for you, sorry buddy.

finally. I am also educated in China, and now the English is not my big issue, but we still fight for the exam, because the World needs (needs it).

first time logged on this forum, and first time comment other people's writing with my not (non) proper English. sorry words for you, guy I cannot give you much help.