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TWE 39

People used to learn from the book, in the belief of that it is the most effective way. Currently, more and more forms of learning technologies have become available, say, Internet, video program and remote teaching. Consequently, the traditional way appears less attractive to me now.

With the help of Internet, we can easily find the useful information wasting much less time. Once, my professor required me to complete a paper about modern macroeconomics. I would go to the library to search what I needed spending a whole week. And even if I find the very book, it was highly possible that the book was booked by others already. That means I might spend another week to wait for the book. However, now I can use the Google to look for the related materials in less than a minute. And then the material is available right now in the electric form, rescuing me from the misery of waiting.

Moreover, at present, we are also able to comprehend the readings in a much versatile form. The video instructions provide not only visible and vivid pictures, but also sound tracks. Hence, students may choose the way fit them perfectly to learn the knowledge. For instance, I am most sensitive to the sound. Thus the listening material could help me learn the knowledge quickly and profoundly.

Another sophisticated technology is the remote teaching system. In light of it, citizens who lived in the countryside would keep in touch with the modern information and knowledge, while do not need to spend 4 hours to commute from city to their homes.

All in all, what we need to talk about now is not if the technologies could help us learning more effective, but how much it can. 

作文从考G开始就一直是自己的弱项，虽然自己逻辑感觉不错可是G的作文分很低，我想一定是败在语言上了。但是又不知道哪里不对，哪里不地道，郁闷非常！！望大牛们来指点！这里我30min勉强完成的一篇文章字数也不多

People used to learn from books, believing that it is the most effective way. Currently, more and more (删掉 forms of，因为techonologies里就含有forms的意思)learning technologies have become available, say（个人觉得such as更书面一点）, Internet, video program， and remote teaching. Consequently, the traditional way appears less attractive to me now.

With the help of Internet, we can easily find the useful information within much less time. Once, my professor required me to complete a paper about modern macroeconomics. I thought about going to the library, yet it would take me a whole week. And even if I found the very book, it was likly to be booked by others already. That means I might have to wait another week for the book. Now using google, however, I can find(look for 表示动作) related materials in less than a minute. And then the materials are available right now in the electric form, rescuing me from the misery of waiting.

Moreover, at present, we are also able to comprehend the readings in a much versatile form. The video instructions provide not only (既然是video当然visible)vivid pictures, but also sound tracks. Hence, students may choose the most suitable way to learn knowledge. For instance, I am sensitive to the sound. Thus the listening material could help me learn the knowledge quickly and profoundly.

Another sophisticated technology is the remote teaching system. In light of it, citizens in the countryside could keep in touch with(似乎应该换一个词组) the modern information and knowledge, while do not need to spend 4 hours commuting from their homes to the urban classroom.

All in all, what we need to talk about now is not if the technologies could help us learning more effectivelly, but how much it can. 

我觉得楼主的这篇文章内容没有涵盖全，题目里说到learn more infor and learn it more quickly，可是文章里learn more infor似乎没大提及。