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TWE180,第一次写的作文,希望大家不慎吝啬的批!

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楼主
发表于 2007-9-6 23:00:00 | 只看该作者

TWE180,第一次写的作文,希望大家不慎吝啬的批!

Why movies are so popular all over the world?

 

One of the most popular pastimes today is movie .It has so deep influence that people like it almost all over the world.

 

Movie could provide people with a way to live and entertain .Almost every day we could hear people talking that how they evaluate a new film after they watching it and how much they like their favorite film star .The movie now is a kind of industry ,which provides us with multifarious films to satisfy our various tastes .The actor or actress in the film could become the star in our heart ,we learn the fashion they stand for and even imitate their gestures and tastes of clothes .And at the free time we could watch movies ,we also could spent a romantic time with our lover in the theater .The film make our life become so colourful and beautiful.

 

Movie is so glamourous that it could influence people's opinion about the history and life .From the Saving Private Ryan ,we learn that the war isn't as romantic as we have thought ,which is cruel and filled with flood ;From the Gladiator ,we learn the history of the ancient Rome ,the conflict inside the royal is so cruel that the prince could kill his brother even his father to usurp the throne ;From the The Shawshan Redemption ,we know that our faith is a kind of powerful spirit  energy and with which we could overcome any difficulties ;From the Forrest Gump ,we are deeply moved by the main role--Forrest Gump ,who has warm hearted ,charity ,honest and other high qualities of human ,but it is these qualities that we are lack of .We could see that without these movies we may overlook many details in our lives.

 

In brief ,movies has a unbelievable power to influence our life .Without movie ,we can't imagine the baldness of our off hours .We have admit that movie have become a absolutely necessarily part of human's life.

沙发
 楼主| 发表于 2007-9-7 19:31:00 | 只看该作者

没有人看看吗???

自己顶一下

板凳
发表于 2007-9-10 01:04:00 | 只看该作者
你的字实在太小了看得好累
地板
发表于 2007-9-10 01:16:00 | 只看该作者

总体来说还可以,但你可以在开头就点名你要说的理由先预告一下,开头和结尾过短,所以导致你的文章字数不足,字数对分数也有很大影响,另外感觉你的句型还可以,但论点和展开之间的衔接有点散,更紧密一点会更好,还有词性多变化。加油

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发表于 2007-9-13 15:38:00 | 只看该作者
字数不够,用词在丰富些。
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