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80. Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

There is an old saying goes, “East or west, home is the best.” It is obvious how important a home means to a person. Recently, my parents and I just left an old traditional house and moved into a modern apartment building. Many friends keep asking me these days  “How is your new home?” Compared with the traditional house, I have to say that living in a modern apartment building has more advantages.

First of all, since the building is located in the most prosperous part of the city, it is more convenient and time-saving for my family members to go out. My school is only ten minutes’ walk away from my home. Therefore,  I can have one more hour to sleep than before and enjoy my breakfast without any hurry. Moreover, my parents need not waste time picking me up to and from school. Subway station and bus stops are nearby. Thanks to the ideal transport , living in an apartment building provides us with more opportunities to see the latest exhibitions, films, or plays, which are only a short bus ride away. I vividly remember the poor experience when living in a traditional house. Some friends invited me to watch “Royal Casino” at seven p.m. in the movie theater which is in the center of the city. I quickly had dinner and ran to the bus stop at five to catch the only bus that can directly take me to the destination. There aren’t any subway stations nearby. Since it was the rush hour, the bus had only run one third of the way by six fifteen. The film almost came to the end when I got there. What a frustrating experience I had! Now, I’ll never have to worry about having frustrations of this sort.

Another important point is that there are many great sports facilities in the neighborhood: indoor and outdoor swimming pools, gyms for basketball and badminton, fitness centers and etc. They give me the freedom and flexibility of doing exercise at my own choice. In addition, I’ve made a lot of new friends in these places. Other facilities such as clinics, supermarkets, parks, and recreation centres benefit the residents as well.

All in all, living in a modern apartment makes my daily life more convenient and colorful. As a consequence, I prefer to live in my new home.

请教一下大虾，考试时候第三段可不可以不写？？我写完第二段其实时间已经到了。感觉时间真的很紧。一写了detail的东西，感觉就占了好大的篇幅。应该怎么办咧？？另外，结尾跟开头能不能给点建议咧？？ 谢谢！！！！！！

嘿.感觉跟楼主完全一样呐.。

所以我就根据德克的建议只写四段.

两个reason一详一略就好～

Moreover, my parents need not waste time picking me up to and from school.

唔.。 这句感觉有点点不通呐.

是不是可以考虑改成"my parents do not need to waste time..."

还有总觉得pick sb. up只有接没有送的意思呐.?

个人小小意见...见笑了～

my parents can save time from drive me to school..

my parents do not need to spend time on drive me to school..

我乱说的..德克上次的成绩多少阿?

我觉得楼主第一点写的好像多是地理位置方便的房子和地理位置不方便的房子的比较~~~~~

可能点一下modern apartmant多配备有完善的交通设施比较好~~~

因为旧房子也可以建在你学校旁边，或者地铁站旁边也会有旧房子~~哈哈

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