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Large amounts of money and a comfortable living are both admirable value for our human beings. Some people may desire to have a comfortable living. However, for my perspective, I prefer to gain large numbers of money.

First and foremost, the large amounts of money can provide us a variety of things we demand. For instance, we have to consider the price of the goods while we are shopping in a supermarket because we may not have sufficient money to purchase them. However, after obtain plenty of money, we do not have to hesitate and just pick whatever we like. Undoubtedly, having much money is great deal.

The second reason is that earning a comfortable living is part of the benefits of owning enough money. If we can obtain a great deal of money, we will earn not only a comfortable living but also a luxurious living. We can travel all over the world and live in a five-star hotel instead of a ordinary hotel as we have to save money for other purposes. The more money we have, the better our living condition is. Consequently, vast money could offer us higher standard of living.

Last bur not least, it would reduce our psychological pressure from getting money in daily life. In our society, most people try to find a good job and get a decent salary to support their finance. They inevitably need to take thought for their jobs and ponder how to make more money. Thus, in a long-term stress, they are more dangerous to have a mental illness. It is a better alternative to have adequate money.

In summary, according to what I present above. We can see that how wonderful to have large amounts of money. Therefore, I believe that it is more critical to make wealth than to have a restful living.

First and foremost, (这个foremost感觉很多余) the large amounts(没有s) of money can provide us a variety of things we demand(这句可以改成,the large amount of money enable people to afford variety of items and services they wish to own before. )For instance, we have to consider the price of the goods while we are shopping in a supermarket because we may not have sufficient money to purchase them. (这句可改成, people's capabilities of purchasing the goods which they desire are subject to the coins they hold in their pockets,感觉更形象)  However, after obtain(obtaining) plenty of money,we do not have to hesitate and just pick whatever we like. (太口语化, by making tons of money, people are able to select any luxury goods without hesitation.) Undoubtedly, having much money is great deal.

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