ChaseDream
搜索
12下一页
返回列表 发新帖
查看: 3283|回复: 10
打印 上一主题 下一主题

我写作不怎么样,请大家猛拍

[复制链接]
楼主
发表于 2007-5-7 20:22:00 | 只看该作者

我写作不怎么样,请大家猛拍

Topic:

It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

It is utterly a catastrophe for me to waste my precious leisure time to drive from my neighborhood to the movie theater for a blockbuster-virtually the drive time is, at most times, longer than a movie (Lord of the rings is an exception). Even more suffering, to those who have one or two “little emperor” to take care of, they will inevitably experience the affliction resulted from children’s successional noise and cry, of course. To such misfortune, another must be added-the highway to the movie theater is widely recognized as the vastest parking lot in our city. In the light of such a situation, setting up a movie theater, indubitably, is a salvation for us unfortunate people.

Saving time is a tangible merit of building a theater in our neighborhood, but not the only one. Simultaneously, it would undoubtedly bring our neighborhood with a considerable number of employment opportunities. It is good news for those who have underwent(undergone) the frustration triggered by the failure in job seeking and been worrying about their jobs in our neighborhood.

Without a theater in our neighborhood, actually, life is to some degree monotonous. We deem watching a movie as a special treat-we prepare for a long time to drive to the remote movie theater and to tolerate the tough drive time. In other tedious and friendless evenings, watching TV might be the unique form of entertainment. However, it will wholly change if a movie theater (were) to be built. Any new movies are at hands-fortunately only several minutes walk away. Via this method, the movie theater would certainly add color to our lives. In addition, those related shops, say, candy shop, soft drink shop, fast food restaurant also make life more convenient.

However, to me, as a matter of fact, the most alluring advantage of the movie theater is that it never fails to provide young people with a perfect place to date-quite(quiet) and dark, without the risk of being perceived by parents.

After four paragraphs tough writing, I believe unshakably, those reasons will suffice to support my perspective-building a movie theater in our theater is a perfect choice.


[此贴子已经被作者于2007-5-17 20:44:37编辑过]
沙发
发表于 2007-5-17 10:26:00 | 只看该作者
顶一下NN作文..
板凳
发表于 2007-5-17 20:09:00 | 只看该作者
the lord of the rings...
地板
发表于 2007-5-17 20:12:00 | 只看该作者
have undergone
5#
发表于 2007-5-17 20:14:00 | 只看该作者
date-quiet and dark
6#
发表于 2007-5-17 20:16:00 | 只看该作者

i prefer:

free of the risk

7#
发表于 2007-5-17 20:19:00 | 只看该作者
if a movie theater WERE to be built
8#
 楼主| 发表于 2007-5-17 20:43:00 | 只看该作者

因为是限制时间写的,所以有一些minor errors,

谢谢修改!!!!!!

9#
发表于 2007-5-23 11:02:00 | 只看该作者
ding,希望更多的人能看到
10#
发表于 2007-5-23 11:08:00 | 只看该作者

行间距太小了,看起来好费劲,文章是好文章,就是要看一会儿就要缓缓眼睛了,还有,因为行间距太小了,文章中用的好多新词,俺用金山词霸就无法显示正确.

终于看完了

您需要登录后才可以回帖 登录 | 立即注册

Mark一下! 看一下! 顶楼主! 感谢分享! 快速回复:

所属分类: TOEFL / IELTS

近期活动

正在浏览此版块的会员 ()

手机版|ChaseDream|GMT+8, 2025-6-13 07:56
京公网安备11010202008513号 京ICP证101109号 京ICP备12012021号

ChaseDream 论坛

© 2003-2025 ChaseDream.com. All Rights Reserved.

返回顶部