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To achieve success, knowledge learned through study is more important than the ability of creative.

            Whether creativity or knowledge lays a more pivotal role in determining people's success seems a hard question to answer. Different people hold different views according to their diverse backgrounds and perspectives. Looking around all way the celebrities lead to success, we cannot definitely to say that knowledge learned through study weighs more than the ability of creativity. And I will illustrate my point of view as follows.

           The existence of creativity is the source of fortune. Both common sense and business brain can tell us that it is the creative brain that produces the fortune. With the development of modern society, technology plays a more and more vital role in the operation of company. For example, the inventions of computers and internet are all the combination of human being's brains. Would this stuff be created without the people's genius or would these stuff can be manufactured just due to the knowledge learned through study?

           In addition, there lies a paradox between the practical experience and knowledge from the books. As the problem the undergraduate students often face, whether knowledge or creativity from practice can be solved in such a famous example as follows. Bill Gates, the wealthiest person in the world, made a big decision during his school years in Harvard. Rather than going on studying, thus getting a high degree, Bill chose to quit and turn to investigate into the operation of soft wares. Why? How would a talented student drop his big future, which comes from the study of knowledge? The definite and true answer would be too much absorption of knowledge from the books will hinder the development of personal creativity, which is more critical to his personal success. That's why children should not be forced to study due to the fact that too much emphasize on knowledge will kill the born imagination. As a famous person says, how a people develope without the creativtiy of the whole people and how could a country develop without the progression of the technology.

          Though solide knowledge can build up a big foundation of technology, the imagination plays the same role of engine. I want to quote a famous anthropologist’s sayings that the imagination and the thinking ability is the huge difference between animals and humans. What's more, it is just the ability that commits the vital role, which promotes the whole development of modern technology.

To achieve success, knowledge learned through study is more important than the ability of creative.

            Whether creativity or knowledge lays a more pivotal role in determining people's success seems a hard question to answer. Different people hold different views according to their diverse backgrounds and perspectives. Looking around all way the celebrities lead to success, we cannot definitely to say that knowledge learned through study weighs more than the ability of creativity. And I will illustrate my point of view as follows.

同意jecci的意见，开头应该亮出自己的观点。另外，这个开头有点死板和模板的味道很浓，"Different people hold different views according to their diverse backgrounds and perspectives."这种毫无意义的句子可以不要的。

其实用一些生活中的小事例，就可以带出一个生动的开头，随便举一例，你再斟酌：现代人都很讲究读书本上的东东，书本上的都是代表过去的事情和经验啦，诚然，我们从过去可以学到很多，但是未来的东东很多是无法预料的喔，仅靠经验而没有创造力，怎么应付瞬息万变的新时代涅？!

           The existence of creativity is the source of fortune. Both common sense and business brain can tell us that it is the creative brain that produces the fortune. With the development of modern society, technology plays a more and more vital role in the operation of company. For example, the inventions of computers and internet are all the combination of human being's brains. Would this stuff be created without the people's genius or would these stuff can be manufactured just due to the knowledge learned through study?

这段的观点用得不错，可惜例子稍嫌虚了些。讲讲机器人的产生减少了人们多少的劳动力，讲讲internet的发明拉近了世界的距离，讲讲你用skypy与远在地球另一侧的朋友讲电话省了多少钱。。。这些都是creativity所带来的巨大好处啊~

另外，最后一句表达好像有欠妥当。

           In addition, there lies a paradox between the practical experience and knowledge from the books. As the problem the undergraduate students often face, whether knowledge or creativity from practice can be solved in such a famous example as follows. Bill Gates, the wealthiest person in the world, made a big decision during his school years in Harvard. Rather than going on studying, thus getting a high degree, Bill chose to quit and turn to investigate into the operation of soft wares. Why? How would a talented student drop his big future, which comes from the study of knowledge? The definite and true answer would be too much absorption of knowledge from the books will hinder the development of personal creativity, which is more critical to his personal success. That's why children should not be forced to study due to the fact that too much emphasize on knowledge will kill the born imagination. As a famous person says, how a people develope without the creativtiy of the whole people and how could a country develop without the progression of the technology.

这一段写得相当好，赞一个，哈~

          Though solide knowledge can build up a big foundation of technology, the imagination plays the same role of engine. I want to quote a famous anthropologist’s sayings that the imagination and the thinking ability is the huge difference between animals and humans. What's more, it is just the ability that commits the vital role, which promotes the whole development of modern technology.

Nice ending, 如果开头也能这样，这篇文章值相当高分咧~~~MM加油哈~