[求助]好心人们.....可怜一下........改改作文吧!!!!!!!

As far as my personal viewpoints are concerned（此处罗唆，而且my和personal语意重复。直接用as far as I'm concerned吧）, I considered that friends are the indispensable for peoples’ long journey through their life（lives）. Because the people, who is concerned about you so much, is（are） your friends except your families（应该用besides吧）. In that case, what is the most important quality for people to keep the relationship between their friend and them（them指代不清晰。用what's the most important in keeping the quality of friendship？是不是好一点）? I maintain that it is honesty. Accordingly, I disagree with the above statement that
     letting friends to make some mistakes rather than telling them truth that will destroy the relationships（that后面独立出来一个句子吧。长句子太多了会让人头晕。而且表达不够清晰）.

Firstly, I recognized that people, who are able to point out your drawbacks immediately, are your really（true） friends, even though your friends did something that make you felt unpleasant. For instance, my father, he said he just dealing with those people who always criticized him for his mistakes. At beginning, I felt confused about my fathers’ saying. Why my father wants to acted in such a foolish（foolish这个词太重了，silly可能好一点） behavior that makes him felts uncomfortable and embarrassed? However, by seeing my father’s successful business career, I have understood about my father’s idea at last. Actually, correcting mistakes are able to help people make a progression on their regular life. Truly friends, from their heart, wish you to acquire improvements, so they will also point out your mistakes.

There is another reason, why I cast my preference for agree with the essays’ topic, is that I maintained that such behavior will not ruins（ruin） the friendships. Even though people felt angry formerly, by thought carefully, people will realize who really concerns about them. In other word, allowing friend to make mistakes with the purpose of keeping friendships must be led（leading） to a bad consequence. Because I think I cannot trust the person who is not honesty（honest） to me. So there is no reason to continuing（continue） the friendship.

At last, I want to make a conclusion that reliable friendships depend on the  honesty. Making your friends feel happy is not the only way to cultivate your friendships. Sometimes, helping them to correcting（correct） their mistakes will accumulate your friendships more quickly.

谢谢啊!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

As far as my personal viewpoints are concerned, I considered that friends are the indispensable for peoples’ long journey through their life. Because the people, who is concerned about you so much, is your friends except your families. (语法上有问题吧？还有BECAUSE放句首比较别扭。)In that case, what is the most important quality for people to keep the relationship between their friend and them（这个语法不对吧？）? I maintain that it is honesty. (这句有点奇怪。)Accordingly, I disagree with the above statement that letting (这个词有这个时态吗？）friends to make some mistakes rather than telling(语法不对。没有对称)them truth that will destroy the relationships.