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1T,想找一两个战友来互改作文

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楼主
发表于 2005-12-14 16:17:00 | 只看该作者

1T,想找一两个战友来互改作文

隔一两天一起选个topic来练练手,然后互相修改,不知道有无同道中人?有意者站内短消息联系吧。


本人大概英语水平:考过GRE,作文很低,3.5;有一篇英文文章被国际会议收录。

沙发
发表于 2005-12-14 18:21:00 | 只看该作者
up up 大家一起来互改作文,共同提高
板凳
发表于 2005-12-21 19:03:00 | 只看该作者
楼主和我经历很像呀,一起改吧
地板
发表于 2005-12-23 15:35:00 | 只看该作者

我也1t


现在练作文呢

5#
发表于 2006-1-4 23:47:00 | 只看该作者

我也是1T,作文还没怎么练呢,就是把理由顺了一下。。。


可是还有很多题目觉得很郁闷。。。

6#
发表于 2006-1-5 19:33:00 | 只看该作者
This is my composition for  the topic:

It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work
of its  

members. Compare the contributions of artists to society with the  

contributions of scientists to society. Which type of contribution
do  

you think is valued more by your society? Give specific reasons to  

support your answer.

My writing is as following, can anyone give some advice?








In
my opinion, artists and scientists both make huge contribution to the society,
although their contributions are in quite different forms.






The
scientists do various research which helps reveal the mystery of the nature and
give us the insight of the law of the universe. Scientists’ work often leads to
the advanced technology which is constantly shaping the human life. For
example, the research by physicists in the early of 19th century paved
the way to the finding of nuclear energy, which is a breakthrough in the
science history. As a powerful and environmental-friendly energy source, the
nuclear energy is not finding its way to many aspects of human life, from underwater
to the outer-space application.






The
innovation made by the scientists is the driving force for the modernization of
civilization. Ever since the industrial revolution, the public transportation has
developed fast. From the boat, train, automobile to the airplane, the public
transportation are becoming more and more efficient. In the days when the steam
machine was not born, it took people couple of weeks to cross the Atlantic
Ocean in ship, now the airplane can cross the same distance within a few hours.
The modern transportation tools make the earth more a village as the distance
between people is not longer an obstacle.






A significant
contribution by the scientists recently is the introduction of the internet.
The invention of internet changes life thoroughly. With internet, people who
live in different continent can talk at the cost of local call. There are no
more prohibitively expensive international calls. People can surf the internet
and search for information to their interests. The internet also triggers a media
revolution. More and more people tend to update the news by browsing the
internet instead of buying a newspaper from the stand.  It is good for environment as there is much
less demand for the wood used to make the newspaper.






In
contrast, the work of artists is not to change the life but to decorate people’s
life and help make the world a more beautiful place. The music, painting,
architecture, poems, novels all are the diverse forms of the artwork by the
artists. Life would be so boring without their masterpiece. Take music as
example, when we are angry or in low-spirit, the soothing music can calm us
down and make us feel so much better. The music helps us to ease the pressure
which is mounting in the modern life. After a hardworking day, it feels so good
to relax yourself in a coffee house and indulge into the piano music. And you
can even dance to the music, which makes you feel so high.






Another
example is the book. We learn the experience and life story of others from
reading the novels and poems. And we learn the valuable moral lessons from
reading too. Nowadays the series of novel “Harry Potter” and the movie adapted
to the book are very popular among kids all over the world. The kids love the
book not only because of the wonderful magical world, not also the virtues they
learn from the characters such as courage, teamwork, friendship. The influence
of a great book to the shaping of positive personality on the readers can never
be underestimated.






Looking
back on the human history, it is fair to say scientists and the artists make
similar contributions to the society. Without the effort of either of them, the
world would not be as a beautiful and wonderful place as it is today.  





7#
发表于 2006-1-5 22:42:00 | 只看该作者
楼上的,6分!
8#
发表于 2006-1-6 11:16:00 | 只看该作者

6楼写的字数也太多了吧


300字我觉得就足够了

9#
发表于 2006-1-6 14:27:00 | 只看该作者
I also feel that it is too lengthy.

In fact it took me about one hour. I find it really hard to finish the
writing within half hour. I need to practise more to produce an
acceptable article within the prescribed time frame. Following is my
another writing for the topic below. Can anyone give any advice?

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People should read only those books that are about real events, real people,
and established facts. Use specific reasons and details to support your
opinion.






  




To
many, reading is a lifetime pleasure and hobby. Reading
helps us understand the outside world and inner world as well. It is true that
people always learn a lot from books that are about real events, real people
and established facts. But it is also beneficial to read other types of books,
such as novels, fairy tales and science fiction, just to name a few.






Novels
are about imaginative characters and their life stories. Hardly the replicas of
life of any particular persons in the history, novels are often a mixture of
the imagination with the stories of people the author got to know in their own
course of life. In the world-famous classical novel Jane Eyes, the novelist presented
us the heroine named Jane. Once an orphan, Jane struggled in her tragic
childhood and eventually grew up into an independent girl and found a true
love. Jane is a character that comes out of the imagination, yet apparently
Jane’s unique personality like the self-respect, passion for  life bears a strong similarity to the author
herself. Although the stories of the main characters are faked, readers are touched
by the novel because of the emotions in the book that they feel truly relate
to.






Fairy
tale is another form of artwork which is mostly attractive to kids. In the
fairy tales, not only the animals like fox, wolf and lion can talk like human
being, the plants like leaves and flowers can talk as well. Although it can
never happen in the real life, kids love those stories and they have no trouble
in accepting the fact that animals and plants can communicate just like human
being. The fairy tales teach a lot of virtues to the kids through the lovely
stories tailored to the kids’ levels of understanding. Through the fairy tales,
the kids learn how to tell good from bad, kindness from evil, bravery from
weakness. Honestly, few forms of art can educate kids better than the fairy
tales.






Science
fiction usually forecast the future of the world. Some of them present us an
awesome scene of the universe and human life after years of evolution. Some
even describe the fierce conflict that might happen between human and the
intruding aliens. Although most stories come from the author’s imagination, the
books are often based on concrete scientific fact and evidence. The intrusion
of alien is a reasonable speculation as people all over the world were rumored
to witness the UFO landing on earth. Also, the scientists often find they are
inspired by the innovative ideas presented in the science fiction and some of
these ideas may even guide them in their research.  One century ago, a science fiction described a
kind of ship that can cruise under the sea and launch unexpected attack.
Decades later the first submarine came into life.  There are numerous stories of such kind. Because
of the inspiration that science fictions have on readers, they never fail to
top the book charts and even find their way into big-budget movies.






For
people who care about the facts, the books on the real life and real events are
right for them. Yet for those with open mind and adventurous spirit, they
surely find much more joy in reading a completely different range of novels
which introduce an amazing world of the past or the future. Both books have
their fans and it is advisable that a serious reader not miss either of them.





10#
发表于 2006-1-6 14:49:00 | 只看该作者
Please give some feedback on my writing for the topic:

some people like to study alone, but the others prefer to study with groups. which one do you prefer?






Everyone has his own preference when it comes to the study. Some may
feel like studying alone, some may feel like studying in a group. As
far as I am concerned, I would choose the latter.



From my own experience, it would be so boring to study alone. Just
imagine you lock yourself up in a small room, and try to solve all
these tricky mathematical puzzles. Don't you feel you are left alone by
the whole world? Believe me, it is not such pleasant experience. On the
contrary, you may find study such an enjoyable activity when you do it
together with other people. Exchanging ideas between group members
would add some much fun to the learning process. It is impossible that
you would get bored when you are in a group.



Another reason I don't prefer studying alone is that I always have
trouble concentrating on the textbook for long hours without anyone
else keeping my company. Whenever I encounter any problem in
understanding the materials, I would feel upset and even lose my
temper. Shall I have some friends by my side at these difficult times,
I would turn to them for help, and it proves beneficial everytime.
There is an old Chinese saying which reads: three fools combined are
wiser than one intelligent person. I find it true when it is applied to
the case of study



The most significant advantage of studying in a group is the
efficiency. When you are in a group, you would be so constantly
inspired by other members that you find yourself tend to be more
creative-thinking. By raising and discussing questions, sharing ideas,
you would probably find the difficult stuff become much easier for you
to comprehend. In the end, it turns out that you spend much less time
in the learning than when you have to study alone.



Studying in a group would cultivate many good virtues like
teamwork,leadership, etc. All these virtues are so crucial to your
successful career in the future.



It is true that studying alone has its own benefits. People who are
used to studying by themselves are often found to be more independent
and flexible than others. Nevertheless,  I would rather study
in a group than study alone as the former approach provides me with the
fun,

efficiency and team-spirit which I treasure the most

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