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TWE 129 A university plans to develop a new research center in your country. Some people want a center for business research. Other people want a center for research in agriculture(farming). Which one do you recommend?

Sometimes it is really hard to choose from one to another. Which one is better, a new research center for business or a new center for agriculture? They both have great advantages. However, in my opinion, for my country--China, a new center for agriculture research will be needed more.

First of all, China is one of those countries whose agriculture is the most important issue of the whole country. It has great amount of land for farming since a long time ago. Therefore, agriculture is the one which feeds the whole country. And, more than half of the entir financial income of China is made by agriculture products. A new research center for agriculture will help to find new kinds of farming product which could make even more money for my country. It can be said that China is living on agriculture now.

In the second place, China is still a developing country. It has some areas that stay in poor and hanger. Farming will more helpful for the people in those areas to make money and feed their families. Also, the new research center for agriculture may make some new cheaper and easier growing products that poor people in China could get and grow them easier.

Although a new research center for business is not a bad idea at all and may help on the economy of China, agriculture is the basic needed for China right now. China has to solve people's hunger first, then laterly develop business. So, a new center for business research seems not as important as a center for agriculture research.

Therefore, it is easy to choose from a new center for business research or a new center for agriculture research. The answer is obvious for my country that a new research center for agriculture is more necessary. The most needed one has to be solved first.

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It is always hard to choose from one to another. Which one is better, a new research center for business or a new center for agriculture in my country? It is not easy to say since they both have great advantages in several aspects. However, in my opinion, depends on the individual situation of my country--China, a new center for agriculture research will be needed more.

First of all, China is one of those countries whose agriculture is the most important quality of the whole country. Chian has great amount of land for farming and used it well since a long time ago. And it doesn't really have much thing been good at according to historical issues. Therefore, agriculture is the one which feeds the entire country. Also, more than half of the total financial income of China is made by agriculture products. A new research center for agriculture will help finding new kinds of farming product which could make even more money for China. It can be said that China is living on agriculture now.

Secondly, China is one of the developing countries which are not as rich as those western countries. Some areas in the west of China still stay in poorness and hunger. Farming will be more helpful for people who live there to make money and feed their families. Farming for those are enen more important than their lives. The new research center for agriculture may make some new cheaper and easier growing products that could be used wildly in those areas.

Although a new research center for business is not a bad idea at all and may be helpful for the economy of China, agriculture is the basic needed for China right now. China has to solve people's hunger first, and deals with business later. So, a new center for business research seems not as urgent as a center for agriculture research.

Consequently, it is easy to choose from a new center for business research or a new center for agriculture research in China. The answer is obvious that a new research center for agriculture is more necessary there, because the most basic event has to be solved first. But I belive a business research center will be needed when China is stronger later.

It is always hard to choose from one to another. Which one is better, a new research center for business or a new center for agriculture in my country? It is not easy to say （judge）since they both have great advantages in(on) several aspects. However, in my opinion, depends(depending) on the individual situation of my country--China, a new center for agriculture research will be needed more ( is more useful).

First of all, China is one of those countries whose agriculture is the most important quality of the whole country (agriculture is the most important part in China). Chian(China) has great amount of land for farming and used it well since a long time ago. And it doesn't really have much thing been good at according to historical issues(表达什么意思；另外，does not不能缩写). Therefore, agriculture is the one which feeds the entire country(the products of agriculture are the main food resource for our entire country). Also, more than (one) half of the total financial income of China is made by(from) agriculture products. A new research center for agriculture will help finding (help后用不定式，our country to study) new kinds of (updated) farming product (technology) which could make even more money for China. It can be said that China is living on agriculture now.

Secondly, China is one of the developing countries which are not as rich as those western countries. Some areas in the west of China still stay in poorness and hunger (barren situation). Farming will be more helpful (a good way) for people who live there to make money and feed their families. Farming for those are enen more important than their lives(要表达什么？). The new research center for agriculture may make （develop）some new cheaper and easier growing products that could be used(planted) wildly（我想你是想用widely） in those areas.

Although a new research center for business is not a bad idea at all and may be helpful for the economy of China, agriculture is the basic needed for China right now. China has to solve people's hunger(y) (problem) first, and deals with business later. So, a new center for business research seems not as urgent as a center(that) for agriculture research.

Consequently, it is easy to choose from a new center for business research or a new center for agriculture research in China. The answer is obvious that a new research center for agriculture is more necessary there, because the most basic event has to be solved first. But I belive(believe) a business research center will be needed when China is stronger later.

几点意见：

1．    我认为你的审题有问题。并不是说只建立哪个，因为BUSINESS CENTER肯定已经有了。你的意思是我们现在就建立一个Agriculture Center, Business Center 没有，以后再说，等Agriculture发展了再说。应当，是什么重要，目前新建什么。

2．    有的句子，实在不知道你在表达什么，要不就不要，要写就清楚一些。

3．    重新考虑理由一，好象不明确。