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Nowadays, it is a hot topic about the reasons why people attend college or university. Different people hold different opinions due to their previous experience. Some people think that getting new experiences is the main aim to attend college or university. Others, however, think that increasing knowledge is the essential reason that people attend college or university. As far as I am concerned, I would tend to side with the latter one. In the following discussion, I would like to elaborate and provide evidence to support my viewpoint.

The first and most significant reason that we cannot neglect is that university or college is the best place to learn knowledge.  Without an adequate environment, people cannot absorb knowledge efficiently. For instance, for people, it is not likely to learn English alone without practicing with their fellows that university or college can also provide. With the assistance from fellows, people can increase knowledge more quickly. Hence, I think that there are no better examples than these ones to demonstrate the point clearly.

Another head and chief reason that I have chosen to put here can been seen by everyone is that people attend college or university not only to learn knowledge from textbooks but also（前后不对称） how to get along with other people in a group.  Without knowledge mentioned above, the hopes of other expectations that one might hold when attend university or college such as career preparation and new experiences will not be accomplished. If you can see this, you can understand it more deeply.

Admittedly, there is no denying that increasing knowledge for people to attend college in the hopes of preparing the career or acquiring new experiences is not the only gateway（如果把这个句子简化一下，就成了increasing knowledge is not the only gateway.好像不对吧）. However, this alone does is too weak to sufficiently strengthen the point.

When the advantages and disadvantages are carefully compared, the most striking conclusion is obvious. （没必要独成一段。）

Taking into account all these factors discussed above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive, we can safely come to the conclusion that increasing knowledge is important for future career and should be considered the main goal for people to attend college.