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Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

With the prevalence of pets in our modern society, more and more people begin to treat their favored animals as members of their family along with only as their pets.（这里的with后还可跟其他副词或介词，再加名词吗？） As far as I am concerned, such relationships are not sagacious enough for us, because there are too many detrimental factors outnumber its benefits to support it. There are numerous reasons why I consider it is not a good relationship, and I will explain a couple of important and obvious ones here.

The first and foremost, paying too much attention or even being obsessed by the pets must weaken the emotions among the folks and relatives, especially in the extended family. Here is a real vivid example for myself. As I was brought up in a Chinese traditional big family, I have been enjoying the warm and lively life since I had my own clear memories. My kindly grandfather was so impressible for me and my younger sister and brother even several years ago. Yet was not everything changed until a green parrot came into my family, which nearly took the place of us in our dear grandfather’s heart so quickly.  I was so sad that even all of us kids attempted to drive the annoying bird away, contrarily, we were separated from grandfather by our parents. It is really unfortunate memory of me merely owing to a single bird.

A further reason is that sometimes the pets would bring us awful illnesses. For instance, it is said that some bacteria concealing around the cats will cause the pregnant women to give birth to their babies abnormally, which is really miserable for human beings.  Another popular example will convince most of us that a special “flu” leading by some poultries almost disturbed our routine daily life and made most people upset day and night, especially people who lived with a lovely duck or goose. Virtually, large numbers of sicknesses are still not predicable by the doctors and scientists, so what we should do is just trying our best to keep the pets and ourselves clean, meanwhile, being cautious to any abnormal symptom as prompt as possible.

In addition, with the constant changing of interests of people, various animals have been invited into our families. For instance, pigs, snakes, and even raccoons, have been the new members of pets, which maybe give rise to the variation of certain species sooner or later. Probably millions of years later, our descendants will never seen some sorts of the animals again which is so common today, because of the elimination within the natural competition throughout a long period.

Admittedly, some old persons leading an isolated life still feel cheerful and comfortable with the pets , especially who have no offspring.

In the last analysis, without doubt, animals are our friends. But from the above discussion, it  is not difficult to draw the conclusion that a close relationship with pets was not as really good as most people think.

时常徘徊于CD内外，反复品味着各位高人的真知灼见，同时得益于大家的慷慨分享，却久久未曾有勇气show出自己的劣作；但苦于大战在即，始终为作文忧心忡忡.......终于鼓足勇气 传上一篇煞费苦心的初稿，肯请诸位评点！！！感激涕零！！！

以下是引用Irene_yang在2005-1-10 4:00:00的发言：

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Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

With the prevalence of pets in our modern society, more and more people begin to treat their favored animals as members of their family along with only as their pets. As far as I am concerned, such relationships are not sagacious enough for us, because there are too many detrimental factors outnumber its benefits to support it. There are numerous reasons why I consider it is not a good relationship, and I will explain a couple of important and obvious ones here.

The first and foremost, paying too much attention or even being obsessed by the pets must weaken the emotions among the folks and relatives, especially in the extended family. Here is a real vivid example for myself. As I was brought up in a Chinese traditional big family, I have been enjoying the warm and lively life since I had my own clear memories. My kindly grandfather was so impressible for me and my younger sister and brother even several years ago. Yet was not everything changed until a green parrot came into my family, which nearly took the place of us in our dear grandfather’s heart so quickly.  I was so sad that even all of us kids attempted to drive the annoying bird away, contrarily, we were separated from grandfather by our parents. It is really unfortunate memory of me merely owing to a single bird.

A further reason is that sometimes the pets would bring us awful illnesses. For instance, it is said that some bacteria concealing around the cats will cause the pregnant women to give birth to their babies abnormally, which is really miserable for human beings.  Another popular example will convince most of us that a special “flu” leading by some poultries almost disturbed our routine daily life and made most people upset day and night, especially people who lived with a lovely duck or goose. Virtually, large numbers of sicknesses are still not predicable by the doctors and scientists, so what we should do is just trying our best to keep the pets and ourselves clean, meanwhile, being cautious to any abnormal symptom as prompt as possible.

In addition, with the constant changing of interests of people, various animals have been invited into our families. For instance, pigs, snakes, and even raccoons, have been the new members of pets, which maybe turn out to be varietal sooner or later. Probably millions of years later, our descendants will never seen some sorts of the animals again which is so common today, because of the elimination within the natural competition throughout a long period.

Admittedly, some old persons leading an isolated life still feel cheerful and comfortable with the pets , especially who have no offspring.

In the last analysis, without doubt, animals are our friends. But from the above discussion, it  is not difficult to draw the conclusion that a close relationship with pets was not as really good as most people think.

时常徘徊于CD内外，反复品味着各位高人的真知灼见，同时得益于大家的慷慨分享，却久久未曾有勇气show出自己的劣作；但苦于大战在即，始终为作文忧心忡忡.......终于鼓足勇气 传上一篇煞费苦心的初稿，肯请诸位评点！！！感激涕零！！！

是TWE182中间没有横线的。有没有横线搜索的结果是不同的。您可以试试。感觉楼主写的不错。 是卡时间的么？

接受brace的建议，立刻修正！

问题是，我也知道这个时间问题，的确完成一篇 是超出了限定时间不少，所以我才犯愁～～～

还有不到十天就要上阵了，真是一天比一天急呀！！

急切希望听到具体一些的建议，诸如：

1、观点立意是否比较偏？我比较了同一题的一些范文 几乎都是AGREE的，我的反对意见是否举例还不够典型？

2、结构算不算严谨，或是也太落俗套？

3、具体语句有那些欠缺或错误？（拼写应该没问题的吧，至少我已在WORD里校对过）

恳请一一指正，因为自己往往看N多遍，还是不知道错在哪里唉！

有劳大侠！！！

1。观点上，我觉得应该符合常识比较好。如果觉得不容易确定，就写50％50％的。

2。结构一般5－6段。不要紧。

3。具体语句，一下看不完。但是似乎大词语比较多了点点

个人看法。

希望版主可以不厌其烦 帮我批改一下作文！

这篇字数是多了点，但相当一部分是自己修改的时候添加的；这样可以便于多暴露一些自身“缺点”，让阅览者指出，也望版主见谅！

后天就要考了，作文还没写几篇....感觉好多东东还没复习好啊，有些手忙脚乱的～～

这个帖子还没经版主和T友仔细批改过，自己不顶一下 恐怕又要沉没于帖子堆啦；

拜托、烦劳各位再阅一下（自己感觉还是不太到位啊..），正在准备另一篇“选择类”的，三大类型各备一篇，足矣！！否则也来不及了啦...

先谢啦！～～