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DancingAme · 发表于 2012-12-30 10:19:55

44. Claim:It is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as ahero.
Reason:The reputation of anyone who is subjected to media scrutiny will eventually bediminished.
Hero is the symbol of society, for it stands the character of the society.So people will choose some outstanding people as our heroes, historical characteror public figure currently. While there exist a strange phenomenon that thereputation of the hero who is subject to the media will eventually bediminished. Therefore, it's still possible to set as example living person? Myanswer is definitively yes, it’s possible.
Although the reputation of the hero will be diminished, it does notwrite off the role off the hero.
Firstly, we must admit that heroes are all normal humans like everyone of us. We cannot require them in the standard of gods. They can haveweakness and have possible to do wrong things. But true heroes are acceptedbesides their faults and sandals. Though Clinton is considered to misuse hispower in deceiving public about his undisciplined behaviors, he is still themodel of presidents in American history. Nobody is always right, we should havetolerance on their small mistakes and have fair comments on them, not just denytheir positive role.
Secondly, some damages to the reputation are not caused by the faultof the hero himself. So many factors contribute to it. In order to seekprofits, the press makes up the news or scandals ignoring of feeling of hero.Such happens mostly on entertainment stars. Rivals in the campaign may alsointentionally dig up secrets and maximize the stain of the accident. So weshould be aware of the fact that hero is innocent, we can’t write off theirrole just because of public untrue comments.
We need living man or woman to be our hero for they are in the sametime with us. Historical figures also have the effect on guiding us to theright way, but some laws and disciplines change, which are not fit to our currentcustom. Heroes stand the characters of a society, so they also have to keeppace to times.
In a word, I can’t agree with speaker’s statement. We need livingpeople as our heroes, even if their reputation have stains .But if we can havemore tolerance on them, we may be wiser to learn a hero. And if we can do moreto protect heroes’ reputation from diminishing intentionally, our heroes willbe more perfect.

麻倉枼 · 发表于 2012-12-30 11:11:37

44. Claim:It is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as ahero.
Reason:The reputation of anyone who is subjected to media scrutiny will eventually bediminished.

Hero is the symbol of society, for it stands for the character of the society (这句究竟想表达什么？社会的特征？). So （前面已经是因为。。所以。。了这里就不要So了，想用的话我会用Therefore） people will （最好tense保持统一） choose some outstanding people(别扭people choose people) as our their heroes, 【historical character or public figure currently】(这部分不是应该放在as their heroes前面么). 【While there exist a strange phenomenon that the reputation of the hero who is subject to the media will eventually be diminished.】（这句话没说完整） Therefore, it's （Is it） still possible to set as example living person? My answer is definitively yes, it’s possible.

Although the reputation of the hero will be diminished, it does not write off the role off the hero.
Firstly, we must admit that heroes are all normal humans like everyone of us. We cannot require them in the standard of gods. They can haveweakness and have possible to do wrong things. But true heroes are acceptedbesides their faults and sandals. Though Clinton is considered to misuse hispower in deceiving public about his undisciplined behaviors, he is still themodel of presidents in American history. Nobody is always right, we should havetolerance on their small mistakes and have fair comments on them, not just denytheir positive role.
Secondly, some damages to the reputation are not caused by the faultof the hero himself. So many factors contribute to it. In order to seekprofits, the press makes up the news or scandals ignoring of feeling of hero.Such happens mostly on entertainment stars. Rivals in the campaign may alsointentionally dig up secrets and maximize the stain of the accident. So weshould be aware of the fact that hero is innocent, we can’t write off theirrole just because of public untrue comments.

We need living man or woman to be our hero for they are in the sametime with us. Historical figures also have the effect on guiding us to theright way, but some laws and disciplines change, which are not fit to our currentcustom. Heroes stand the characters of a society, so they also have to keeppace to times.
In a word, I can’t agree with speaker’s statement. We need livingpeople as our heroes, even if their reputation have stains .But if we can havemore tolerance on them, we may be wiser to learn a hero. And if we can do moreto protect heroes’ reputation from diminishing intentionally, our heroes willbe more perfect.

我本来想帮你看看语法什么的，
光是看了你的第一段就知道你要重写了。。

普渡哥 · 发表于 2012-12-30 12:03:46

是啊，语法结构都需要加强。

DancingAme · 发表于 2012-12-30 12:26:05

44. Claim:It is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as ahero.
Reason:The reputation of anyone who is subjected to media scrutiny will eventually bediminished.
Hero is the symbol of society, for it reveals the main idea of the society.Therefore, we choose some outstanding people as our heroes, historical characteror public figure currently. While we gradually find that reputation of the herowe select who is subject to the media will eventually be diminished. Is it stillpossible to set as example living person? My answer is definitively yes, it’spossible and necessary.
Although the reputation of the hero is diminished, it does not writeoff the role off the hero.
Firstly, we must admit that heroes are all normal humans like everyone of us. We cannot require them in the standard of gods. They can haveweakness and have possibility to do wrong things. But true heroes are acceptedbesides their faults and scandals. Though Clinton is considered to misuse hispower in deceiving public about his undisciplined behaviors, he is still themodel of presidents in American history. Nobody can always be right, we shouldhave tolerance on their small mistakes and recognize their contributions to thesociety ,so that we can give fair comments on them.
Secondly, some damages to the reputation are not caused by the faultof the hero himself. So many factors contribute to it. In order to seekprofits, the press makes up news or scandals ignoring of feeling of hero. Suchhappens mostly on entertainment stars. Rivals in the campaign may alsointentionally dig up secrets and maximize the bad effect caused by the little mistake.So we should be aware of the fact that sometimes hero is innocent, we can’t writeoff their role just because of public untrue comments.
We need living man or woman to be our hero for they are in the sametime with us. Historical figures also have the effect on guiding us to theright way, but some laws and disciplines have changed, which are not fit to ourcurrent custom. Heroes reveal the highest ideals of a society, so they alsohave to keep pace to times.
In a word, I can’t agree with speaker’s statement. We need livingpeople as our heroes, even if their reputation have potential to be diminished.But if we can have more tolerance on them, we may be wiser to learn a hero.And if we can do more to protect heroes’ reputation from being diminishedintentionally, our heroes will be more perfect.

DancingAme · 发表于 2012-12-30 12:28:19

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