狗子的作文贴。。还有10天考G求狠拍……11-1更新

d0gzi · 发表于 2012-11-1 00:28:09

恩……感觉总是不是很会写……估计这次杀G又要死翘翘了……谢谢版主！

d0gzi · 发表于 2012-11-1 01:36:24

True success can be measured primarily in terms of the goals one sets for oneself.

The speaker contents that it is goals one sets for himself that matters for true success, rather than other factors. I generally agree with this statement, as it is the ideal condition that every man pursues- to be oneself and fight for and uphold one’s dream and virtue. Yet, sometimes human beings, as the product of the interdependent society, have to yield to the values and goals set by the society to a certain extent.

First, individuals can not be fully motivated by the values and goals set by the society alone. Even when they have achieved what the whole society may acknowledge as great or outstanding, they can merely feel satisfied or even feel more stressed if their own concept of success has been greatly undermined. Consider the high suicide rate of movie stars, who are regarded as successful people due to their wealth, beauty and impacts on the general public, still always feel unfulfilled as they have to adjust every and each action and emotion to satisfy the general public and the mass media. This kind of example also lies in scientific realm. Einstein devoted twenty years of his life to reconcile the relativity theory and quantum theory and never felt relieved because of his failing in this, after he had already been ranked among the most greatest people in modern society. In this way, life is not about how much praises others give you, but how much applaud you give to yourself.

Additionally, it is important for one to stick to his/her dream and goals, as sometimes the society, whose goals tend to be more pragmatic and thus less ideal, may fail to appreciate individual goals, especially goals and perspectives of prodigies. Consider Van Gogh, who is now regarded as one of the most intellectual painters in human history, devoted his whole life, heart, and soul to painting until he could not even pick up a pencil. He, however, only managed to sell one painting throughout his life. Yet who, in this modern society, can diminish the insight and greatness of Van Gogh? Who can argue Van Gogh is a loser as his goal contradicts with the society in his age?

Admittedly, the standard set by the society to evaluate success has its own merits as well. The society can not hardly prosper or make any progress if every and each individual pursues what they dreams, as no one, if given the chance, is interested in working hard and become slaves of power and money. Moreover, goals of individuals and society are not necessarily mutually exclusive, such as goals for peace, equality, morality, love among neighbors and relatives. Therefore it is possible for people to evaluate their success upon both standards.

To sum up, I generally agree with the speaker that goal of oneself is more effective to evaluate whether one is successful or not, yet goals between society and individuals can be reconciled and over-emphasis on individualism may do harm to the progress of the society.

d0gzi · 发表于 2012-11-2 10:36:47

The following appeared in a letter to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper.
"In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend—the city-run public schools—comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary 预算的priority they give to public education. For example, both as a proportion of its overall tax revenues and in absolute terms, Parson City has recently spent almost twice as much per year as Blue City has for its public schools—even though both cities have about the same number of residents. Clearly, Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
1.   twice,same residents
2.   collect from … government
3.   schools that

This argument is well-presented yet ill-conceived. The author assumes that Parson City residents pay more attention to good education as they place the budgetary priority on education. Though this argument seems to be plausible at the first sight, there are several flaws preventing it from being logically convincing.
To begin with, a problem arises when the author assumes that government in P City spends more on education as it has been put a greater budgetary priority. Although it is entirely possible, the author fails to offer sufficient evidence about the real circumstances to back his idea. Therefore, it is also likely that the government finally fails to do so and the real amount of money applied to education in P City is less.
In the second place, the arguer assumes that schools in P City receives more money as recently education system in P City receives twice as much as that in C city. Nevertheless, this is not necessarily the case, as the arguer does not offer enough evidence to bolster his idea. A proper alternative is not far to seek. The author fails to provide how long the time period is, thus maybe he is comparing the amount of money which schools receives in two years with those C city receives in a year. Or perhaps this is just aberration; in other time C city has always support its education system with much more money. We just do not know. Only through providing more evidence could the arguer convince me that schools in P City have always been receiving much more money.
Finally, even if the author has provided evidence for the foregoing assumptions, one crucial problem still remains when he/she suggests that schools in P city and C city need the similar amount of money. It is also highly possible that C city does not have as many school as P city does. Even through there are similar amount of residents in P and C city, the number of students who need to attend school might be quite different. Moreover, it is also highly possible there are only one big public school in C city and many private schools of good quality that the government need to support, while in P city the government has to spend more as there are much more public schools. Additionally, even if all these are true, we simply can not judge the merit of a education system from the amount of money its government supplies, as these cities differ in the purchase abilities of residents, salaries of their teachers and different prices for teaching instruments and tools. Thus, to bolster his assumption, the author will need to explain why none of other alternatives are able to sustain.
To sum up, the author jumps to a hasty conclusion that P city enjoys a great education based on a chain of problematic assumptions. To support those assumptions, the author must offer more persuasive evidences and take every possibility into consideration.

可怜自己之前太懒。。。模板弄的太晚了。。所以填起来感觉好费劲= = 。。。在纠结要不要到时候先打模板再填。。。

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